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Adam
AdamLv54yr
2020-08-04 21:33

I just don't like the writing style and the jumping of povs without a single indication that it's happening, seeing the same scene twice, once for each person involved, it's just not my thing

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CouchSurfingDragon
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Thank you for your review, friend-cultivator! The POV jumps can be confusing. It's something I have to work on as an Author.

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The best way to describe this novel for me would be, a more bloody, gory and dark version of konosuba. The main character reincarnates in the body of the current guild leader of Invictus, a member of the Medusa race, and with some fragmented memories of his new body. And he has only a system ( with no personality or system store with stupid quests, thank God) to inform him of the names of the people around him, and there status and hostility level. And apparently it can analyse and copy the skills and abilities of other people and creatures...? I love the character design of this novel, the characters in this novel feel more 'alive', the enemies aren't evil for the sake of being evil, they each have there own personalities, with there own motivations, ambitions and dreams. There are however some problems, for example, the lack of explanation of how the power system works, how magic works, the difference between the races in this world, etc... Like, it's fine if everything isn't explained to the last detail. But at least having a more detailed explanation about the race of the main character, the Medusa race, and about is strength, like, sometimes he looks super powerful and other times weak, tho he looks more like an assassin for the most part, maybe that's why. One thing in this novel is the, sometimes, excessive pov change, like, you can pass 5 or more chapters following the other characters going throught aventures and life or death battles, finding love, etc... . And you start wondering if the main character started hibernating or something. Don't get me wrong, the pov changes aren't bad and are very good even. It's just they are to God damn long, and when one ends, another starts. And that can be very frustrating, especially when you what to know the background and abilities of the main character. All in all, it's a great story. :-)

Nat1Life
Nat1LifeLv11

I'll be direct. Love the work, don't understand why it doesn't have more views, want more of these kinds of novels. So many people who are writing "reborn in a new world with a system" have ****ty grammar, nonsensical wish fulfilment storylines and stupid plot developments. I dont understand why they have 10s or 100s of times more views than this. Now, with my rant out of the way, I'll give my grade to boost the novels rating as a straight 5, and give some of my selfish opinionated thoughts. I have only read somewhat after ch70, but in my self entitled opinion, that is enough to judge. Writing quality - Hey, it's real English. Meaning there are no typos or stupid grammar or horribly translated, out of context sentences. And oh my god thank you for no repeating, overused and unimaginative descriptions like "it was like the difference between heaven and earth". Story development - Somewhat irregular, but not in a bad way. The important parts that you want to read are well detailed and narrated. The combat, the encounters, character interactions etc. The tedious things like battle aftermath or uneventful traning are sorted out in a few paragraphs. Character design - Interesting, strong(personality), and loveable characters. Or hateable depends on what floats ur boat. The speech patterns between the character are easily recognisable and consistent. World background - Didn't get much of it so far, but what I did, I liked. Introduced Countries/kingdoms/empires seem interesting and promising, and the world seems to slowly be coming alive. I still don't have any idea about the world's geography, like the amount of continents, world size or climate for that matter(other than it seems to constantly be cold. Maybe its winter idunno). But hey, neither do most Americans about earth(Ha). No offense, just stereotypeing. Overall, quite an enjoyable read and much more deserving than most of the trash on the top charts, and with better writing quality. Save a few. Hey, I said that I'd be direct, not quick.

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