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2020-03-03 20:46

The writing us phenomenal but still need work on grammar and punctuation. Overall, the plot is well written and guides the readers to its intended outcome. I've read some novels with the similar premise, but they were poorly written. How do you feel writing a story that captivates my eye?

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Thank you so much, I feel honored to have captivated you hahaha. I will do my best to improve grammar and punctuation. English is not my first language so I ask you to bear with me while I improve!

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