1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read it wrong also 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wondering why you still reading this 8. You see the mistake right? (on7) 10. But did you see I skipped number 6? 10. You checked 11. And saw I doubled number 10 and skipped number 9 13. And did you see I skipped number 2 14. You got tricked 15. But did you see that I skipped number 12 16. You checked and wandered why am I wasting my time on this. ( You got tricked ) Seriously though, it's very good.

Shit story. Wants to be luffys twin brother which is a ****ty cliche, And also the story is **** so.... 👌

The most interesting one piece fanfic i read so far.. The development of story and character really good.. Just hope the author don't make the MC too OP, because this story really have potential for the future.. Maka more daily update and don't drop this story

Great start to a story. it is nice to have an MC who is not OP from the start. Good job on character devolpement too Hope you keep up with it and not drop.

I really enjoyed the start of the book even if his "character pull out of thin air" was pretty bs and unnecessary, yet almost 50 chapters later, I'm getting thoroughly tired of all the split focus on the crew and the utter lack of shows of might and power by the MC. Why has he never used his devil fruit form? Why did we never get a single shocked reaction from a crowd or a group of enemies scared for their life and pissing themselves off in their boots just by looking at an ice and fire giant hellish demon? The only reason I started this book and kept at it was the interesting powers of the mc but several months into this story the focus is drifting further and further apart from the only cool pulling element of the story and I'm tired of it. I don't care that he found a random original character with conqueror haki when he doesn't even have it yet, it only bothers me. I don't care if Nojiko is naturally lucky. I don't care about Baby 5, she was never an interesting character to begin with, and, even if she actually was one, pulling her out of her timeline as a kid only made her an OC since she didn't have any traits that made her the character we knew yet and you could have just written a generic childhood friend from his village in her place and nothing would have changed. The only difference this makes is that the MC ruined a huge chunk of his future knowledge by altering a lot of events for literally no reason. I just want to see the mc shred things apart with his insane powers while he keeps fusing more fruits into it and upgrading it further and further. Is it really too much to ask?

well written..long as chps...no angst tragic **** [little drama is acceptable]... suggestion: -OP MC... OP DF [SUGGESTION: MYTHICAL ZOAN....Leviathan or Kraken: Water and wind control........OR....KAIJU..[made beast..essential gives user elemental powers...from Darkness to fire..to even radiation..fucking nuclear] -ROMANCE -NO ORGANISATION..TO OVER DONE -Make a small crew..max 5 *cough*...*cough*...hint...hint? -5 emperor of the seas... -Dont make MC train luffy -World travel...[bleach....highschool dxd...fairy tail: before 400 years GOOD SHOW AND GOOD LuCK

Finally a good fanfic about one piece, the upload of chapter is constant, the grammar is good and the MC isn't dumb, he make a few mistake not saving skill points but that because he don't really know a lot of the system, loving the idea of author of devil fruits for the MC

as I hate when they spam 5 or 1, it's an interesting novel, but it has several negative points The First: and the one that bothers me the most makes the marine look as if it were the bad ones when they are the good ones, it is like comparing the police and the criminals, obviously there is corruption but the majority of marine are good. Second point: he is the typical protagonist who prefers not to intervene in the main story. Third point: it has too much power up do not expect a protagonist who strives to get something in the first chapters thanks to the super op system already obtained 4 fruits of the devil and already has control of the observation haki because you can update your skills with points that Give the system.

Nice story. Up up up up up u up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up Still waiting for new chaps. Add some roman please, and keep it up