Review Detail of Manasong in Rupegia

Hey there! I find it odd that Webnovel allows me to leave a review but I saw other authors doing the same, so why the hell not? Anyway, this is my first story so you can guess that my writing improves *a lot* throughout the story. This means that the first few chapters are the worst I have written, but not exactly *bad* (though chapter 2 is a pet peeve of mine, I really dislike it but I don't have the energy to rewrite it). So by chapter 5 is where things start to get really interesting. It's where I find my stride and things start to smooth a little. I do think that the MC's emotions on the first two chapters need a little adjusting, so perhaps in the future I will come back to it. Also, the chapters are in need of a grammar review. From what I know it's not unreadable or too distracting but I do have a problem with things like in/on/at (due to Portuguese, my native language, not having this distinction); some mixed up expressions, bone apple tea style; and run-on sentences. And the last concern: if you think he MC acquires girls too quickly it's only at the beginning. Once the main cast is formed things slow down and their characters become extensively developed.