Review Detail of Harleeyah24 in What is a Genetic Vampire?

Honestly, I love the ingenuity and newness of your storyline. It’s like a fresh, fantasical take on very familiar issues and it makes it easier to relate with the characters. I like the pacing and your overall tone and delivery, but I think you need to work a bit on your grammar construction and punctuation. Asides from that, this is a truly promising story and I think you’re doing an amazing job!