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Squirrelly_Whirly1
Squirrelly_Whirly1Lv47mth
2024-09-09 08:27

This was dropped four years ago just now reading it but my honest review is that this capture a lot of the real point people go over in regards to overlord and the people that played Yggdrasil. The point is for all those that haven’t noticed is that all the people who are from that world who got transmigrated are damaged individuals. Because let’s be honest momonga is psychologically obsessed with nazarick and the first friends he ever made. Even when they left he did t play with any other people ultimately stagnating the guild be cause he couldn’t complete new guild quests and objectives even now in the new world he hasn’t made a single friend still holding on to that fleeting hope his friends are in this world. Now this mc jack graham as he calls himself or vertum or some garbage name he came up with. The guys a nut case, he believes children are conniving goblins who lack discipline, he just like ainz is stuck in the past still thinking about a girl that he himself avoided and didn’t persue, you can tell he is underdeveloped in his brain yet the author pushes across strategies and different things as if he is smart just like ainz. The story is rubbish that hardly moves

Overlord Blue Citadel Alternate

ZGearCecil
4.7
62 Chs

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Malachim
MalachimLv2

Doing an amazing job recreating the story with a different progratonist! I love how Jack's a Dragon... Cute. Slightly different backstory, with the same twist, just everyone is dead this time. WQ: So far the quality is good, I really like it personally, very few confusing grammar problems or issues that I notice. If any at all. SoU: Very quick releases! Don't burn yourself out, Author-sama, burning out your precious brain and interests will cause problems for us all! SD: The story progresses quickly from what I've been reading, but at the same time, it follows the same pace as the anime/manga and light novel. There are plenty of changes, and their pretty agreeable. I look forward to more. CD: Jack is Jack, a character which the Author continues to use in all his books. It kind of reminds me of how Gene Roddenberry reused the character Dylan Hunt in all of his personal works. The other canon character's interactions with him are believable. Especially with Enri, since before and after she knew of Ainz true nature, she believed in him and wanted to thank him properly. Since the main character isn't undead, I'm sure there is going to be some fluff on the way. If you know what I mean. World Background: The world is a sandbox for the Author, but he continues to build on the aesthetic and even gives the Waste City from the game an appearance not given by the original author of the series. Way to go, ZGear! - Thank you for reading. I hope you enjoy this Review.

5yr

letmesleep
letmesleepLv3

really did a great job in recreating the story while still keeping the multiple personalities of npcs that make the original overlord interesting alongside their interaction in the otherworld

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InkSavant
InkSavantLv10

Don't overload yourself now Mr Overlord. Doing 2 Overlord and an Original at one time. Oi... Author-san, you are getting tired, aren't you? haha. So far the story has great promise. Grammar is great, very readable. The quality is high, details are stellar, and current stability is within established parameters. Story development is steady paced and you're using a variation of the Rescuer Romance trope, doing good... Looking forward to that tag you have up there. *winkwink* [ Reposted, Reading Status didn't update. ]

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SirrowLv14

God realy ??? this mc question his servants ob they have time vor him realy man. Mc servants Design 👎👎👎👎👎👎👎 story bul**** realy i cant any more . Mc charakter...👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

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amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

already interested suggestion....no other players from yggdrasil other than lala...not even ains...[many characters become boring]..lala because I want romance and fluff..if harem..max 5..Godlike MC..world travel.. anyway goodluck.

5yr
XxAinz_Ooal_GownxX
XxAinz_Ooal_GownxXLv11

Ainz Approved

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Gravity_Cat
Gravity_CatLv2

Keep sending me links Author-sama! Your stories are interesting, I just wish you were scatterbrained and jumping from idea to idea. That's beside the point, this review is not on you, but your current work. I love it. Gimme more, but not too much. I still want to read the Darkening of the romances in the other books! Dark Fantasy ftw!

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DollShururu
DollShururuLv12

Author tbh this fanfic is way way worse than your 'Overlord-Seraphim' one. It's also quite lame how the MC is predicting something like "We'll make contact if that village is attacked" or "Maybe they're finding a needle in a haystack." MC had no basis for these kind of predictions but saying it anyway to make him look smarter. I'm starting to doubt about "HIGHIQ" tag in this story too, especially when the Floor Guardians in this story seem to be a stupid bunch. It seems the other characters were being downgraded so MC would look smarter. The MC basically think everything and his subordinates only move when they're ordered, unlike demiurge & others in the original who are capable themselves.All the Subordinates do here was Praise the MC lackadaisically and with very poor construct of words even. I like the your other fanfic but this one is thumbs down.

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A_pidgeon
A_pidgeonLv14

Overall, one of the best read i had on this site, so sad that you dropped it ;( Like really ! so much potentiall ! and you just cut a the best part... Please continue to work on it !

4yr
Starvation
StarvationLv10

I had high expectations for this, honestly. It was a refreshing take yet it failed. His(Guild's) Npcs are bland, nothing interesting about them. It feels like you're reading something off a circus. He barely gets here(new world). He complains all the time that he didn't step up his relationship to the virtual girl. And the next thing he does is kissing and inviting her to the castle.. Mc is rather bland, i think i understood the pattern that the author tried to achieve. Yet i feel it didn't work. He's quite bland, not good , yet not very bad. Couldn't make myself to continue further. Good writing. Good plan, bad execution.

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