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Daoist249419
Daoist249419Lv155yr
2020-05-02 14:21

The author promotes brutality and gang rape in this novel and add’s ASTERISK to the words making him less guilty while passively promoting the idea that violence is justified. Dear friends much better novels out there.

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Li_Yi_Wei
Li_Yi_WeiLv15

Cough * these u mean? Em its not to make it less guilty it so underage readers dunno the full word 😅

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SunScar9
SunScar9Lv4

I read the first 8 chapters of this novel and am basing my review on that alone. Writing Quality: I feel like you will learn how to write precisely with time. Knowing that it is your first novel, I won't go hard on you, but here are some things you can improve: 1) Grammar- you could use a free grammar checker online or a paid service if you like to see where you are going wrong. Read more books to get a sense of how grammar flows. 2) Sentence Structure- You have a lot of run-on sentences. This means that you are either not using proper punctuation or you have long-winded sentences that lose meaning. Stability of Updates: I don't know about the routine but this author has posted a lot of chapters over the month, so I will trust their dedication to posting on time. Story Development: It is slow. But because it is the initial chapters, I won't judge based on it. Character Design: The author needs to work on making the characters multi-dimensional. I mean... your characters are predictable and say things that make them all seem like the same person. I don't see how each character is different from the other. The author tells me the personality but doesn't show me how they are as people. This is something the author needs to improve on. World Background- I was a bit confused by the names at first but quickly realized that it was a diverse community as most global cities are. I will need a little more information on the background of the characters, their lives, and their aspirations to make a better judgment.

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