Review Detail of bibiyenini in The System's World

Okay, I am on the 2nd chapter and I was wondering what Jason would do to get back on his word. This is a spoiler so don't open this! I don't have any problem with the plot, it's good actually, makes a lot of those system novels. One thing I noticed is that the punctuations are incorrect and it must be sometimes a disturbance on reading. Just a little proofreading will do. Don't worry author, I'll support you on this as a fellowmen! The great job ahead!