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This novel makes it hard for me to like. The setting is well thought through and the mc's background is unique and interesting. I like that the MC is strong but has room to grow. However if you cannot get past a couple things then you will also find it hard to like this novel. 1. Illogical scenarios and character actions. 2. Repetative hypersexualized relationships among many children 10-13 y/o 3. Beta MC (repetitively abused by his peerage/love interests. I'm talking being punched in the face hard enough to fly into the wall while all the girls are smiling, including the MC) The illogical scenarios start from the beginning of the novel. The MC, even though being kidnapped as a child loosing his mother and being experimented on/tortured and then displaying a dissociative episodes(multiple personalities), has ZERO fear of others and is willing to trust them instantly. I think people seriously underestimate how debilitating disassociation is for people, especially in cases of severe trauma. It's a good backstory and it makes one feel for the MC but it just doesn't match with how he acts. The worst part is the multiple inner monolouge's where the MC explains how her is being both smart and careful when he is basically being an idiot who is manipulated by those around him. Just because you say someone is acting wise does not mean they actually are. Unfortunately it isn't just the MC. For some reason, everyone in this novel treats children like adults and there is almost no difference in how they speak or act. Yes, young children can be just as interested in love and sexual relationships, even if they don't fully understand it, but when every single chapter is about the MC flirting with his harem and the girls seducing him when he is 11 y/o is disturbing. Especially when this is not only encouraged by the surrounding adults but they even participate in 'grooming' them. The relationships are just way to rushed in every way. I want to like this novel more, but the inconsistencies in characters and the forced relationships combined with abuse of a dissociative kid is off putting, at least for me.
How to survive in the World DxD with Fragment Memories
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Thanks for the review, it's a shame my work is a complete mess. Since after all I am a noob writer, not doing this professionally nor asking for money when I am writing this. As for the "abuse" I would like to ask where the MC was "abused?" Since I only know of, the punch in the face (Which I explicitly mentioned there was no injuries due to difference in abilities between MC and Shirone), it was not done with ill intentions. So it cant be classified as abuse. Please note (Not all) but some girls hit a guy when they are being teased, etc. Now imagine someone of Shirone's capabilities hit? Especially unprepared, even if it does not hurt a bit naturally the MC would be flying. Its a supernatural world. (But I can understand your point) Then point #2, guess the joke I made there went too far. Since it was all "talked" about and never really "done" other than teasing since the girls enjoyed the MC's reactions. Please note, although appearance-wise is the same, Fallen Angels / Devils common sense is different. (Akeno's side is now an exception since Shuri is quite open-minded, she won't mind as long as it does not go further. And she knew the MC won't take it further, which is why she could join in the fun of teasing him) Point One: Illogical scenarios. Please note the MC did not personally "experience" what the previous host did, this is also reflected at how adaptable the MC is to move forward. He won't become a shut-in all of the sudden, and yes. There is many cases that many pull back from society after experiencing something like this but there is exceptions! Strong stubborn personalities like the MC who could shove the past behind his back and move on. Another point, trust is a very very profound word. Telling half the things does not mean one trust someone, otherwise why is the MC keeping the fact he transmigrated in another world to himself? He simply chose to be open on certain things to increase his value to others to live, while he learnt about this world more. Is this wrong? Once again, what is wrong with flirting? >.> In middle school back in the days I saw many times girls swamped with love letters, poems and flirty words. Is it immoral? And also, the flirting is another way of making the team closer to one another. -.- Not sure why it is a problem, it's not like they had *** at 11 years old. **: Do you know what Abuse means? here is the results on Google: use (something) to bad effect or for a bad purpose; misuse. NOW THEN, WHERE IS THE ABUSE? -.- really
Dude, that is the definition generally used for substance abuse, not psychological abuse which is much more obtuse and hard to define. In fact there is no universally agreed upon definition of psychological/emotional abuse within relationships. I will try to highlight my points better now that it is not 3am but much of my review hinges around the repetitive nature of the story. First the abuse. I was hesitant to bring this up in my review as it is not always explicit and is not presented the more commonly recognized forms, and suggesting it could be offensive. But it is there and the reason I brought it up is the frequent occurrence scenes that could be perceived as such. From wikipedia "Emotional abuse commonly has Emotional abuse can take many forms. Three general patterns of abusive behavior include aggressing, denying, and minimizing. Even though there is no established definition for emotional abuse, emotional abuse can possess a definition beyond verbal and psychological abuse. Blaming, shaming, and name calling are a few verbally abusive behaviors which can affect a victim emotionally. The victim's self-worth and emotional well being are altered and even diminished by the verbal abuse, resulting in an emotionally-abused victim" Sorry for the large quotation but my point here is the MC regularly experiences verbal and emotional abuse, mainly through degradation. I do not deny that teasing happens in normal relationships but the frequency and nature of it here are why I bring it up. In your created worldview the MC may only experience these things occasionally, but we the reader experience it multiple times every chapter. This issue of what the reader experiences being so different from what the MC experiences is also apart of the next thing I wrote about. The illogical scenarios surrounding the MC's actions. Yes, I totally agree with you that there are people whole can overcome debilitating mental illnesses, but they still exhibit the symptoms. It is a cause and effect relationship. While you do talk about the MC experiencing dissociative episodes(alternate personality changes) and having memory problems, we as the reader never see or experience it (at least as far as I have read). Almost 100% of what the reader is exposed to is a single, normal ***** personality and nothing else. My point here is the setting for the characters and what we are shown in the story don't match, and thus, is illogical. It is not that MC can't act normally but that we never see him act abnormally even though the setting suggests that he does. Thus, as the reader we are continuously told to believe one thing while being shown something that suggests it is another. So overall, yes the actual relationship may not be abusive. However, we the reader are frequently shown scenarios of the MC being insulted, degraded, or depressed due to the actions of those around him, to the point where it appears as abuse. The same is with the illogical scenarios where we are told one thing but continuously shown another. I really what to repeat this point because it doesn't just apply to the MC(his peerage is trauma victim central), its not that he can't logically act normal, its that we are not shown him acting abnormal. I won't address in length the third point of repetitive hypersexualized relationships among 10-13 y/o as it is the same issue. It is not that children cannot do these things but that it is the majority of what the reader is exposed to. I hope that some of what I said resonates with you as I have seen other authors doe the same thing but do not try to change it. You can deny all of my personal views I listed above but I hope that you can recognize my point about what the reader sees being different from what they are told as it something easy to fix. Simple miscommunication, often due to the medium of storytelling being different.
CompleteNoob:Thanks for the review, it's a shame my work is a complete mess. Since after all I am a noob writer, not doing this professionally nor asking for money when I am writing this. As for the "abuse" I would like to ask where the MC was "abused?" Since I only know of, the punch in the face (Which I explicitly mentioned there was no injuries due to difference in abilities between MC and Shirone), it was not done with ill intentions. So it cant be classified as abuse. Please note (Not all) but some girls hit a guy when they are being teased, etc. Now imagine someone of Shirone's capabilities hit? Especially unprepared, even if it does not hurt a bit naturally the MC would be flying. Its a supernatural world. (But I can understand your point) Then point #2, guess the joke I made there went too far. Since it was all "talked" about and never really "done" other than teasing since the girls enjoyed the MC's reactions. Please note, although appearance-wise is the same, Fallen Angels / Devils common sense is different. (Akeno's side is now an exception since Shuri is quite open-minded, she won't mind as long as it does not go further. And she knew the MC won't take it further, which is why she could join in the fun of teasing him) Point One: Illogical scenarios. Please note the MC did not personally "experience" what the previous host did, this is also reflected at how adaptable the MC is to move forward. He won't become a shut-in all of the sudden, and yes. There is many cases that many pull back from society after experiencing something like this but there is exceptions! Strong stubborn personalities like the MC who could shove the past behind his back and move on. Another point, trust is a very very profound word. Telling half the things does not mean one trust someone, otherwise why is the MC keeping the fact he transmigrated in another world to himself? He simply chose to be open on certain things to increase his value to others to live, while he learnt about this world more. Is this wrong? Once again, what is wrong with flirting? >.> In middle school back in the days I saw many times girls swamped with love letters, poems and flirty words. Is it immoral? And also, the flirting is another way of making the team closer to one another. -.- Not sure why it is a problem, it's not like they had *** at 11 years old. **: Do you know what Abuse means? here is the results on Google: use (something) to bad effect or for a bad purpose; misuse. NOW THEN, WHERE IS THE ABUSE? -.- really
WiLeYBiGhEaD:Dude, that is the definition generally used for substance abuse, not psychological abuse which is much more obtuse and hard to define. In fact there is no universally agreed upon definition of psychological/emotional abuse within relationships. I will try to highlight my points better now that it is not 3am but much of my review hinges around the repetitive nature of the story. First the abuse. I was hesitant to bring this up in my review as it is not always explicit and is not presented the more commonly recognized forms, and suggesting it could be offensive. But it is there and the reason I brought it up is the frequent occurrence scenes that could be perceived as such. From wikipedia "Emotional abuse commonly has Emotional abuse can take many forms. Three general patterns of abusive behavior include aggressing, denying, and minimizing. Even though there is no established definition for emotional abuse, emotional abuse can possess a definition beyond verbal and psychological abuse. Blaming, shaming, and name calling are a few verbally abusive behaviors which can affect a victim emotionally. The victim's self-worth and emotional well being are altered and even diminished by the verbal abuse, resulting in an emotionally-abused victim" Sorry for the large quotation but my point here is the MC regularly experiences verbal and emotional abuse, mainly through degradation. I do not deny that teasing happens in normal relationships but the frequency and nature of it here are why I bring it up. In your created worldview the MC may only experience these things occasionally, but we the reader experience it multiple times every chapter. This issue of what the reader experiences being so different from what the MC experiences is also apart of the next thing I wrote about. The illogical scenarios surrounding the MC's actions. Yes, I totally agree with you that there are people whole can overcome debilitating mental illnesses, but they still exhibit the symptoms. It is a cause and effect relationship. While you do talk about the MC experiencing dissociative episodes(alternate personality changes) and having memory problems, we as the reader never see or experience it (at least as far as I have read). Almost 100% of what the reader is exposed to is a single, normal ***** personality and nothing else. My point here is the setting for the characters and what we are shown in the story don't match, and thus, is illogical. It is not that MC can't act normally but that we never see him act abnormally even though the setting suggests that he does. Thus, as the reader we are continuously told to believe one thing while being shown something that suggests it is another. So overall, yes the actual relationship may not be abusive. However, we the reader are frequently shown scenarios of the MC being insulted, degraded, or depressed due to the actions of those around him, to the point where it appears as abuse. The same is with the illogical scenarios where we are told one thing but continuously shown another. I really what to repeat this point because it doesn't just apply to the MC(his peerage is trauma victim central), its not that he can't logically act normal, its that we are not shown him acting abnormal. I won't address in length the third point of repetitive hypersexualized relationships among 10-13 y/o as it is the same issue. It is not that children cannot do these things but that it is the majority of what the reader is exposed to. I hope that some of what I said resonates with you as I have seen other authors doe the same thing but do not try to change it. You can deny all of my personal views I listed above but I hope that you can recognize my point about what the reader sees being different from what they are told as it something easy to fix. Simple miscommunication, often due to the medium of storytelling being different.
I think your points are extremely valid, whatever the relationship, abuse exists and can be identified, in any world, the partner who uses violence, verbal degradation, minimization or any form of insult in response to something that bothers him or makes you uncomfortable, it is at least unpleasant and repulsive, no matter the world or history you are in, relationships based on such abuse, yes, it is abuse, it tends to be destructive for both parties and at some point, the victim (MC in the case with his women treating him as a sand bag or a puppet of liberation) becomes resentful, generating anger, hatred and aversion, something that few actors show, not everyone wants to show the dark side of the perfect relationships of a novel, which they use the term "So they lived happily ever after" literally.
WiLeYBiGhEaD:Dude, that is the definition generally used for substance abuse, not psychological abuse which is much more obtuse and hard to define. In fact there is no universally agreed upon definition of psychological/emotional abuse within relationships. I will try to highlight my points better now that it is not 3am but much of my review hinges around the repetitive nature of the story. First the abuse. I was hesitant to bring this up in my review as it is not always explicit and is not presented the more commonly recognized forms, and suggesting it could be offensive. But it is there and the reason I brought it up is the frequent occurrence scenes that could be perceived as such. From wikipedia "Emotional abuse commonly has Emotional abuse can take many forms. Three general patterns of abusive behavior include aggressing, denying, and minimizing. Even though there is no established definition for emotional abuse, emotional abuse can possess a definition beyond verbal and psychological abuse. Blaming, shaming, and name calling are a few verbally abusive behaviors which can affect a victim emotionally. The victim's self-worth and emotional well being are altered and even diminished by the verbal abuse, resulting in an emotionally-abused victim" Sorry for the large quotation but my point here is the MC regularly experiences verbal and emotional abuse, mainly through degradation. I do not deny that teasing happens in normal relationships but the frequency and nature of it here are why I bring it up. In your created worldview the MC may only experience these things occasionally, but we the reader experience it multiple times every chapter. This issue of what the reader experiences being so different from what the MC experiences is also apart of the next thing I wrote about. The illogical scenarios surrounding the MC's actions. Yes, I totally agree with you that there are people whole can overcome debilitating mental illnesses, but they still exhibit the symptoms. It is a cause and effect relationship. While you do talk about the MC experiencing dissociative episodes(alternate personality changes) and having memory problems, we as the reader never see or experience it (at least as far as I have read). Almost 100% of what the reader is exposed to is a single, normal ***** personality and nothing else. My point here is the setting for the characters and what we are shown in the story don't match, and thus, is illogical. It is not that MC can't act normally but that we never see him act abnormally even though the setting suggests that he does. Thus, as the reader we are continuously told to believe one thing while being shown something that suggests it is another. So overall, yes the actual relationship may not be abusive. However, we the reader are frequently shown scenarios of the MC being insulted, degraded, or depressed due to the actions of those around him, to the point where it appears as abuse. The same is with the illogical scenarios where we are told one thing but continuously shown another. I really what to repeat this point because it doesn't just apply to the MC(his peerage is trauma victim central), its not that he can't logically act normal, its that we are not shown him acting abnormal. I won't address in length the third point of repetitive hypersexualized relationships among 10-13 y/o as it is the same issue. It is not that children cannot do these things but that it is the majority of what the reader is exposed to. I hope that some of what I said resonates with you as I have seen other authors doe the same thing but do not try to change it. You can deny all of my personal views I listed above but I hope that you can recognize my point about what the reader sees being different from what they are told as it something easy to fix. Simple miscommunication, often due to the medium of storytelling being different.
If you notice, he spent so much of the time not addressing the grooming behavior and the passive acceptance and encouragement of @dults supporting the sexualized behavior of children. He briefly touches on it and focuses most of his time on other things and buries a brief comment on a huge issue.
CompleteNoob:Thanks for the review, it's a shame my work is a complete mess. Since after all I am a noob writer, not doing this professionally nor asking for money when I am writing this. As for the "abuse" I would like to ask where the MC was "abused?" Since I only know of, the punch in the face (Which I explicitly mentioned there was no injuries due to difference in abilities between MC and Shirone), it was not done with ill intentions. So it cant be classified as abuse. Please note (Not all) but some girls hit a guy when they are being teased, etc. Now imagine someone of Shirone's capabilities hit? Especially unprepared, even if it does not hurt a bit naturally the MC would be flying. Its a supernatural world. (But I can understand your point) Then point #2, guess the joke I made there went too far. Since it was all "talked" about and never really "done" other than teasing since the girls enjoyed the MC's reactions. Please note, although appearance-wise is the same, Fallen Angels / Devils common sense is different. (Akeno's side is now an exception since Shuri is quite open-minded, she won't mind as long as it does not go further. And she knew the MC won't take it further, which is why she could join in the fun of teasing him) Point One: Illogical scenarios. Please note the MC did not personally "experience" what the previous host did, this is also reflected at how adaptable the MC is to move forward. He won't become a shut-in all of the sudden, and yes. There is many cases that many pull back from society after experiencing something like this but there is exceptions! Strong stubborn personalities like the MC who could shove the past behind his back and move on. Another point, trust is a very very profound word. Telling half the things does not mean one trust someone, otherwise why is the MC keeping the fact he transmigrated in another world to himself? He simply chose to be open on certain things to increase his value to others to live, while he learnt about this world more. Is this wrong? Once again, what is wrong with flirting? >.> In middle school back in the days I saw many times girls swamped with love letters, poems and flirty words. Is it immoral? And also, the flirting is another way of making the team closer to one another. -.- Not sure why it is a problem, it's not like they had *** at 11 years old. **: Do you know what Abuse means? here is the results on Google: use (something) to bad effect or for a bad purpose; misuse. NOW THEN, WHERE IS THE ABUSE? -.- really
