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CopperHeart
CopperHeartLv55yr
2020-02-15 09:56

Sorry about this .... I find the idea of the novel promising. However i keep finding it lacking... Take this as point to improve. 1. You need to explain always how stats work. Dont put stats like str agi int char res without proper explaining what they are for. 2. You need to stick with the idea that mc is a isekai/reincarnated person from earth. So he should probably know how to play any for of rpg games. However for the the last 30+ chapter i have read the mc dont give a **** at all. 3. What is the mechanic of his system. How does he gain the skills. What is the use of level up. How many free stat point do he gain every lvl. No explaination was given thus making the whole thing confusing. 4. Explain the power ranking of the world. Explain the world his on more. Its not like earth you know. His leveling up how does everybody else getting strong. It not like his the only person strong in the story.

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MotivatedSloth
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Thanks for the great review! First thing first, I want to explain one thing. This novel started as nothing more than a joke, aimed to keep a comedic tune through while mocking the common tropes. You can kinda see it in the title. :D It was only after writing it for a long time, that my natural tendency to write epic fantasy kicked in, making me take what was done already and reform it into something I can be proud of. So, here are my responses: 1 - I don't need and at this point, I really can't. Do you remember the part about decorations failing to be added? I managed to turn it into a big point, later on, that kinda justifies the lack of explanation. As to how it happens... I can only recommend you checking further chapters! 2 - The problem is, he doesn't know this is an RPG world. Even if he has his system and all, he is basically in the cultivation world. First thing first, he is very quickly reminded what happens to the people with interesting abilities (Eve's history, not sure if you reached so far to learn about it) kinda forcing him to play it low. Damn, I'm more than 300 chapters in, and the small bits of information that I'm very sparingly serving is only starting to form into a bigger picture! 3 - Same like all before. At first, it was just ignorance/lack of experience/hastiness/worry to not input too many info dumps, but I think I managed to cleverly explain it around the currently newest chapters of the story. I'm doing my best to work around what I already did! As for now, you can take it that it's confusing mostly because the MC is the only one in the world with the system (maybe true, maybe not) so it's impossible for him to compare himself to others. He only knows his cultivation level, hence why he focuses so much on it. 4 - I can't. This world is something MC experiences as he grows, and while he continuously furthers his knowledge about this word, it's constantly changing whenever he can see a little bigger picture. It's not the third person type of the story where narrative can infodump important stuff. First-person forces both the author and the reader to take the ride along MC side. All in all, I have the idea to remake first few chapters to make it easier for the new readers to weather through the worst part of the story (since well, I'm over 300k words in, so my experience and ability only continues to improve), but this is such an overwhelming task, that I can't really find the time to do so when I constantly attempt to keep the fast update speed. Overall, I'm glad you managed to point out some of the flaws to the story, and I will make sure to take them into account while writing current chapters and if I ever manage to get into reworking the beginning!

Ahtu_Flagg
Ahtu_FlaggLv4

Hmm, how would you suddenly find yourself in a new world, with a stats screen(with obvious rl effects), and not consider yourself to be in an RPG? At least partially. Add the various rare new species on top of that, and yeah...

MotivatedSloth:Thanks for the great review! First thing first, I want to explain one thing. This novel started as nothing more than a joke, aimed to keep a comedic tune through while mocking the common tropes. You can kinda see it in the title. :D It was only after writing it for a long time, that my natural tendency to write epic fantasy kicked in, making me take what was done already and reform it into something I can be proud of. So, here are my responses: 1 - I don't need and at this point, I really can't. Do you remember the part about decorations failing to be added? I managed to turn it into a big point, later on, that kinda justifies the lack of explanation. As to how it happens... I can only recommend you checking further chapters! 2 - The problem is, he doesn't know this is an RPG world. Even if he has his system and all, he is basically in the cultivation world. First thing first, he is very quickly reminded what happens to the people with interesting abilities (Eve's history, not sure if you reached so far to learn about it) kinda forcing him to play it low. Damn, I'm more than 300 chapters in, and the small bits of information that I'm very sparingly serving is only starting to form into a bigger picture! 3 - Same like all before. At first, it was just ignorance/lack of experience/hastiness/worry to not input too many info dumps, but I think I managed to cleverly explain it around the currently newest chapters of the story. I'm doing my best to work around what I already did! As for now, you can take it that it's confusing mostly because the MC is the only one in the world with the system (maybe true, maybe not) so it's impossible for him to compare himself to others. He only knows his cultivation level, hence why he focuses so much on it. 4 - I can't. This world is something MC experiences as he grows, and while he continuously furthers his knowledge about this word, it's constantly changing whenever he can see a little bigger picture. It's not the third person type of the story where narrative can infodump important stuff. First-person forces both the author and the reader to take the ride along MC side. All in all, I have the idea to remake first few chapters to make it easier for the new readers to weather through the worst part of the story (since well, I'm over 300k words in, so my experience and ability only continues to improve), but this is such an overwhelming task, that I can't really find the time to do so when I constantly attempt to keep the fast update speed. Overall, I'm glad you managed to point out some of the flaws to the story, and I will make sure to take them into account while writing current chapters and if I ever manage to get into reworking the beginning!
yoohime
yoohimeLv6

so tell us when you already changed the first few chaps... then i will postpone this novel for the time being

MotivatedSloth:Thanks for the great review! First thing first, I want to explain one thing. This novel started as nothing more than a joke, aimed to keep a comedic tune through while mocking the common tropes. You can kinda see it in the title. :D It was only after writing it for a long time, that my natural tendency to write epic fantasy kicked in, making me take what was done already and reform it into something I can be proud of. So, here are my responses: 1 - I don't need and at this point, I really can't. Do you remember the part about decorations failing to be added? I managed to turn it into a big point, later on, that kinda justifies the lack of explanation. As to how it happens... I can only recommend you checking further chapters! 2 - The problem is, he doesn't know this is an RPG world. Even if he has his system and all, he is basically in the cultivation world. First thing first, he is very quickly reminded what happens to the people with interesting abilities (Eve's history, not sure if you reached so far to learn about it) kinda forcing him to play it low. Damn, I'm more than 300 chapters in, and the small bits of information that I'm very sparingly serving is only starting to form into a bigger picture! 3 - Same like all before. At first, it was just ignorance/lack of experience/hastiness/worry to not input too many info dumps, but I think I managed to cleverly explain it around the currently newest chapters of the story. I'm doing my best to work around what I already did! As for now, you can take it that it's confusing mostly because the MC is the only one in the world with the system (maybe true, maybe not) so it's impossible for him to compare himself to others. He only knows his cultivation level, hence why he focuses so much on it. 4 - I can't. This world is something MC experiences as he grows, and while he continuously furthers his knowledge about this word, it's constantly changing whenever he can see a little bigger picture. It's not the third person type of the story where narrative can infodump important stuff. First-person forces both the author and the reader to take the ride along MC side. All in all, I have the idea to remake first few chapters to make it easier for the new readers to weather through the worst part of the story (since well, I'm over 300k words in, so my experience and ability only continues to improve), but this is such an overwhelming task, that I can't really find the time to do so when I constantly attempt to keep the fast update speed. Overall, I'm glad you managed to point out some of the flaws to the story, and I will make sure to take them into account while writing current chapters and if I ever manage to get into reworking the beginning!
MotivatedSloth
MotivatedSlothAuthor

First 5 are done long ago xD

yoohime:so tell us when you already changed the first few chaps... then i will postpone this novel for the time being
yoohime
yoohimeLv6

starting...

ultimatecoom
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google str agi int char res and you see stength is for strength and aggility aggility muscle - strength aggiliy - speed chars - looks

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