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Kamatis
KamatisLv34yr
2020-03-29 06:26

First of all, I can't judge your grammar because my grammar sucks too. I don't have any advise regarding grammar except using Grammarly. Well, your writing is smooth and diligent. I was able to easily portray the story because of that. Second, the development of the side characters are good too! Most novels and stories doesn't even bother to put any development to the side characters but you did. I praise you for that. Lastly, the world background is interesting too and this story definitely has a potential. Well, keep up the good work!

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Jin_Daoran
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Thanks! It appears grammar is something we'll both be working on into the future, fellow writer, so good luck to us, haha...

Vibing_Braincell
Vibing_BraincellLv12

I’m pretty well off in my grammar, even if its worse than I pride myself it to be.

Jin_Daoran:Thanks! It appears grammar is something we'll both be working on into the future, fellow writer, so good luck to us, haha...
zee_ees
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me too

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