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Terry_HilfigerLv34yr
2020-03-16 23:13

The author has a very interesting idea for the book, but the implementation came out bad. Not only are some points not consistent with the logic of the simplest relationships, but also the plot is very twisted on events that do not greatly affect the course of history. In chapter 141, the author completely spoils the work to the end, which discourages interest.

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picaco
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As i alredy said that 141 chapter is not part of the novel only an alternative ending. For the other parts, could you put examples?

Terry_Hilfiger
Terry_HilfigerLv3

Besides 141, I also wrote some shortcomings in my opinion

picaco:As i alredy said that 141 chapter is not part of the novel only an alternative ending. For the other parts, could you put examples?
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Here's the author doing a review of this already finished novel. I started writing this novel as my first time truly writing in English to improve it. The grammar and phrase construction is lacking at first, but as the novel advances, I improved in it, Grammarly was a great help. For the Stability of the updates, I finished writing 256 chapters after 10 months, almost a chapter for day as average. Is already finished so there's nothing much to say. About the story, at first it start with a lax and infantil writing, with a very crude English. The story being written day by day without, always changing what I had thought. This causes some plot holes over the novel that I closed maybe a little forcefully over the novel. What most people complained was about the loss of memory. Yes, there was and in chapter forty-something is explained the why. Read it thinking that he has no memories of the novel after his first ring. People also complained about his style that was control-defense, but why? With a team is a good style, being able to control the team, letting the others finish them. Then as the story advances, entering more the solo player mode, his style changes. Summarizing, I liked to write this story even facing against the hate. It starts a little poor and I am not too proud of it, only considering it as the improvement of the later parts. But, I am proud of the end, really liking how it finished. If you like OP characters that goes facepalming everyone, because it didn't matter anything because they are OP and untouchable, this isn't your novel. He grows stronger than his age, faving greater enemies but always with that might lose.

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