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Aoalbjorn
AoalbjornLv35yr
2020-02-23 14:12

Hes weaker than Tang san. hes always 10 rank lower than tang san. why? hes older than tang san and yet his cultivation is lower? he wasted 6 years for gods sake without advancing a single rank just so he doesn't surpass tang san. Mc is tangsan's support character

Douluo Dalu : Frozen Heaven Spear Lord

Pan_Musa
4.1
94 Chs

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Aoalbjorn
AoalbjornLv3

I dropped it after chapter 85 where a strong enemy was intruduced. and not only that the strong enemy was aware of mc's whereabouts and identitiy. he also knows mc's secret. MC is a mere 40 rank and yet his enemy is god level. wtf is going on. it would be unrealistic if his enemy doesn't kill him right on the spot. i k mc can't die as the story would end but how is author gonna keep him alive? how much plot armour is needed to keep mc alive? why not just make MC strong at least as strong as the enemy. why must the enemy know every move of mc. and mc as a dumb naive idiot only wait for plot armor to save his ass

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TheTrueGilgamesh
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Grammar needs a lot of work! The story is good wish he could improve or have someone correct it 😅 I really like you Mc making this review for the daily mission lol

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Its unreadable. The story seems passable but oh boy, let me tell you the grammar is completely horrendous like my God. The sentence structuring and missuage of words is mind boggling I just don't understand how someone can leave so many words out of a sentence and still think "oh, I'm sure they can understand when I speak like a caveman".

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