Review Detail of M0011 in The Wielder of Death Magic

iam no being or trying to be offensive but I have few points 1 the righting is ok I guess but the paragraphs are too long so that is a problem and sometime doesn't make any sense 2 I think everyone is the entire book have some brain problem or you forget. what you wrote like he doesn't mind discard his name but in the same chapter he feels bad? like WTF 3 it was a waste of time. good plot or plan could have been better if you did a plan or a glossary or background or something