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2019-12-23 13:45

I love this book. I may not be a big fan of crossovers but this book us good . it really gets a thumbs up for me😂and the character twists were insane as well as the plot which went completely out the window.

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manny0101
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Lol. Wasn't expecting the 3-star rating after reading the review. Caught me off guard.

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I just can't with this story. I have no idea why it's rated so highly. This entire story is a crazy speed-run of the HP series, a poorly developed and forced romance between the MC and a gender-bent Harry Potter, with some edgy, teenage angst thrown in for good measure. Within 10 chapters there has already been 2 years worth of plot, none of which the MC actually had a single thing to do with, it's more of a foot note. In fact, after 2 years in Hogwarts I don't think he has ever even cast a single spell. The MC thinks that he's smarter and stronger than everyone at only 11-12 years of age. I get that this is supposed to be a Naruto x HP crossover, and the MC uses chakra instead of magic, but it's done in a completely unrealistic way which doesn't make sense no matter how you look at it. Knowing the story of Naruto, having an 11-year-old who has only just learned about his chakra, and only just started to develop his chakra suddenly be able to learn a shadow clone jutsu is already farfetched, but his first attempt summoning 25 clones, then quickly improving that to 45 is insane. Also adding in all the other jutsu he has just apparently acquired without any training what-so-ever just fills the story with holes. The MC is affinity for fire, earth and lightning chakra, yet talks about killing Dumbledore with a Rasengan, which is wind. It just makes no sense. One other thing which bugged me, is that at 11-years-old and after only just learning about chakra, he's fully able to put his father, who is the head of a family, a strong wizard and a former death eater, completely under a genjutsu, with the logic being because it's a move which uses chakra and not magic, nobody in the universe can counter it. This makes literally 0 sense to me. Genjutsu is just an illusion, and there are plenty of illusion spells already in the HP universe. Saying it is impossible to counter or resist just because it's a different power base is ridiculous, at the end of the day an illusion is an illusion. Also, for some reason, the author has this annoying habit of giving everyone nicknames. Peacock, Weasel, Ferret, Old coot etc. It's just pointless and kind of annoying. Rant over.

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