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LonelySago
LonelySagoLv124yr
2020-10-27 11:16

Poorly written. Even if this is a "wish fulfillment" type of fanfic, please organise and think through your wishes. Like, if you summon shenron and make an incomprehensible noise while making a wish. I'm sure shenron wouldn't be able to grant it. I mean, this is only an analogy and i still think new writers like you should strive to improve.. I just hope you will still continue to write and waste everyone's time.. Kidding aside, I've read 1 chapter and am not really inclined to waste more time reading..

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awu wanga ungga bungga!!

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