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Tonyorobsky
TonyorobskyLv133yrTonyorobsky

A work inspired from I Have A Mansion In The Post Apocalyptic World, and other world commuting + trading stories. Writing, updates and plot are OK. The characters design and the world background are lacking. -No one of the main and secondary characters has been properly introduced. We don’t even have an idea of what they look like. Even the places lack descriptions. -The story went straight to the uncle making him a shop keeper in an alternate world. No big reactions about that as well. It feels like it’s just an oddity for the protagonist. -And once more we have a stupid protagonist that doesn’t make proper preparations before leaving the security of his place and venturing into a dangerous world. Just a few days after the attack of a VERY DANGEROUS and TENACIOUS monster. No proper shooting training or self defense training, when there was a f*cking GANG WAR (thus possibly evil and greedy people) in his neighborhood (close to his shop) the previous day!

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My Uncle's Store In Apocalypse (Dropped)

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Super detail review that's strikes accurately on my weaknesses. It also allowed me to understand that a big part of my writing is lacking here and there. Thank you so much! It's inspirational! Although it going to take me a long time to work it better, I'll try my best!

Tonyorobsky
TonyorobskyLv13Tonyorobsky

Noone can make a perfect story. Despite the flaws, I like it. 👍

yanglin:Super detail review that's strikes accurately on my weaknesses. It also allowed me to understand that a big part of my writing is lacking here and there. Thank you so much! It's inspirational! Although it going to take me a long time to work it better, I'll try my best!