Review Detail of kuhaku_sora in Novel replaced.

Amazing concept, and the story provides you a very emotional way to start up the adventure. The way that the sadness occurs in the part brings out the novel, with the progressing character developments for the cherry on top. The advises that I can give you as a fellow author is to never stop editting! There are grammatical errors, but that doesn't mean that the story is not good. Another thing that I want to point out is the way that the story advances. It will be more eye catching if the plot of the story engages into a different act by means of amplifying it. Let's for an, example, instead of saying "9 months later" a better approach could be "Nothing had happened during the past few months. Xau xau had only been etc etc" and the story goes on. It depends on you, the author, on how will you write these sequences, based from your style. Nevertheless, your book is awesome and good luck with your novel~!