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MS_Chavez
MS_ChavezLv24yr
2020-07-26 18:15

This story starts in a dramatic and emotional way. It provides a good hook for those looking for an emotionally charged story. It seems to start a little slowly, introducing the characters and allowing the reader to get to know them. I like how pretty early on we see the main character working to strengthen herself. The characters, the concept, and the story seem sound and fairly well thought out, but unfortunately the writing needs polish. There are a lot of grammatical errors, spelling issues, and words used incorrectly. I also noticed that sometimes the character's full name was used, other times it was a nickname. It was inconsistent and confusing until you get to know the characters better.

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qunin_e
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3 Chs

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qunin_e
qunin_eAuthor

Hello dear, due to some issue, this book had to be published on another link. It would be a great help for me if you can post this review on that link. just type 'The demon in a Beauty' n search engine to get the book. Please it would be a great help for me. Thank you, and have a good day😊

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qunin_e
qunin_eAuthor

With a heavy heart, I had to republish my novel with a new link, though the name 'The Demon in a Beauty', will be same. It look me an year to reach at such reach, and I had to start over again. Your support there, can help me a lot. Adding it to your library, comments, review and by voting. Hope to see you there🤗🤗

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onsbin815
onsbin815Lv2

Good start, a rather bold and good way to start the novel hope it gets intresting later on. Good luck. I need to prolong this view because they aren't accepting until 140 hahha..

5yr
Shining
ShiningLv4

Good story, it's highly recommended to the reincarnation lovers. Though I read only initial chapters, I could stay this story has potential for 5 star rating. I could feel the pain of the siblings and what I like the most is the love of their parents.

4yr
Vulkanys
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Shadow_Magus
Shadow_MagusLv4

Well-made. novel. Little to no writing errors The plot progresses smoothly And just me being honest here, but I don't like romance-related novels. They just feel cringy. However, this novel still have be grasped onto it. Still haven't read the full thing. going to finish it off now. Keep up the great work author!!

4yr
Eugenecruzherr2
Eugenecruzherr2Lv1

I WILL GIVE MY FULL SUPPORT TO THIS NOVEL SO EVERYONE SHOULD READ THIS. I AM GOING TO DRAG ANYONE WHO NEEDS TO KNOW THIS STORY. I WILL MAKE EVERYONE CRY, in a good way, AND LET YOU GUYS ENJOY WHAT I AM ENJOYING!!!!

4yr
Eugene_Herrera
Eugene_HerreraLv1

The story is so good, and it made my cry. This is so rare for me to shed a tear while reading the novel. I really like the story ;-; very emotional and a great way to start the novel!

4yr
kuhaku_sora
kuhaku_soraLv3

Amazing concept, and the story provides you a very emotional way to start up the adventure. The way that the sadness occurs in the part brings out the novel, with the progressing character developments for the cherry on top. The advises that I can give you as a fellow author is to never stop editting! There are grammatical errors, but that doesn't mean that the story is not good. Another thing that I want to point out is the way that the story advances. It will be more eye catching if the plot of the story engages into a different act by means of amplifying it. Let's for an, example, instead of saying "9 months later" a better approach could be "Nothing had happened during the past few months. Xau xau had only been etc etc" and the story goes on. It depends on you, the author, on how will you write these sequences, based from your style. Nevertheless, your book is awesome and good luck with your novel~!

4yr
mtonny081
mtonny081Lv1

good work keep going. give it a try! Really good novel. A bit confusing yet good piece of art! Try apps like grammerly to improve ur writing. But story is good

4yr
munm55487
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Reveal spoiler

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