Item: Novel replaced.
Rating: 5
Author: kuhaku_sora

kuhaku_soraLv33yr

2021-02-12 09:31

Amazing concept, and the story provides you a very emotional way to start up the adventure. The way that the sadness occurs in the part brings out the novel, with the progressing character developments for the cherry on top. The advises that I can give you as a fellow author is to never stop editting! There are grammatical errors, but that doesn't mean that the story is not good. Another thing that I want to point out is the way that the story advances. It will be more eye catching if the plot of the story engages into a different act by means of amplifying it. Let's for an, example, instead of saying "9 months later" a better approach could be "Nothing had happened during the past few months. Xau xau had only been etc etc" and the story goes on. It depends on you, the author, on how will you write these sequences, based from your style. Nevertheless, your book is awesome and good luck with your novel~!

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qunin_e

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qunin_eAuthor

With a heavy heart, I had to republish my novel with a new link, though the name 'The Demon in a Beauty', will be same. It look me an year to reach at such reach, and I had to start over again. Your support there, can help me a lot. Adding it to your library, comments, review and by voting. Hope to see you there🤗🤗

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Good start, a rather bold and good way to start the novel hope it gets intresting later on. Good luck. I need to prolong this view because they aren't accepting until 140 hahha..

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I WILL GIVE MY FULL SUPPORT TO THIS NOVEL SO EVERYONE SHOULD READ THIS. I AM GOING TO DRAG ANYONE WHO NEEDS TO KNOW THIS STORY. I WILL MAKE EVERYONE CRY, in a good way, AND LET YOU GUYS ENJOY WHAT I AM ENJOYING!!!!

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