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SUBSCRIBE_MY_LISTLv55yr
2019-12-07 20:03

The story is too randomly written. One moment you're in Harry Potter the next you're in marvel the other you're in the hospital again. There is no real purpose to the story that you'll be able to find at this point in time. Basically this is like having audiobooks split in parts and all hustled together playing in shuffle mode. Its just so jarring to switch from what is essentially 1 story to then the other. Everytime something interesting happens and you get curious the next chapter comes and it's in another world in a random moment. Honestly. I had more enjoyment reading stories where I had to puzzle out the meaning of words because of poor grammar than I do reading this story. The worst thing is that the author is not that bad of a writer. The formatting and grammar are at a good level for webnovel and none of the 3 stories he is juggling with is actually bad in concept. The problem is really that this really is like listening to several audiobooks on a playlist in shufflemode. One moment your Harry Potter the next you're some random self insert playing superhero in marvel then you're in the hospital... Its just... I respect the writer but this fic has been too poorly executed.

I jump in and out of Harry Potter world .

Trillionaire100
3.9
45 Chs

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Trillionaire100
Trillionaire100Author

Thanks man , I know its frustraiting but the thing is the mc is experiencing what Doctor strange do everyday (he jump in and out of different worlds , collecting powers from there ). And both worlds have a meaning and purpose in the story and that meaning is almost as much twisted as the concept itself . When the time will come for the big reveal . you will jump out of the window either in frustraition or excitement . But I am really a messy writer i am really trying my best

5yr
Trillionaire100
Trillionaire100Author

Oh and the chapters are going to be sorted slowly as the story take root .

5yr
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MovingCorpse
MovingCorpseLv7

I gotta say that this is pretty good. It's starting to make sense in the later chapter. But seriously, you need to learn more for your grammar and enrich your vocabularies to make it more interesting. I don't know for the other, but your idea sounds quite original to me (for a fanfiction, of course). Keep up your good work...

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asaade_ragnarokm
asaade_ragnarokmLv4

the concept is good but the execution is terrible and confusing, spelling mistakes are everywhere the concept is good but the execution is terrible and confusing, spelling mistakes are everywhere the concept is good but the execution is terrible and confusing, spelling mistakes are everywhere

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RoseAmber
RoseAmberLv14

🌹💎 😭 No!!! This was a great read, but now it's dropped. I will give this my last shameless review. Please continue with new split books.

4yr
Imabethatguy12345
Imabethatguy12345Lv3

Don't drop! don't drop don't drop don't drop!Don't drop! don't drop don't drop don't dropDon't drop! don't drop don't drop don't dropDon't drop! don't drop don't drop don't drop

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RoseAmber
RoseAmberLv14

I have been enjoying this so far. Please update.

5yr
ElG0hary
ElG0haryLv5

Great Man keep writing it's a very good novel, i hoped it to be someone who transmigrated to marvel and knew about marvel and harry potter but still it's really great

5yr
koolsalad
koolsaladLv12

The time skips in the middle of the plot make the story unreadable. Suddenly the mc will develop 5 more abilities without any kind of reason for it. Puts a whole new turn on Mary Sue.

4yr
the_game01234567
the_game01234567Lv5

The fanfic is now stopped in order to be in favor of a reboot by the author hence the 5 star in stability of updates and writing quality. On the previous fanfic content, the story flows well and the MC is sometimes not consistent. The world background is mostly overused but it gives a new flavor once you put two worlds together.

4yr
Phoenix1998
Phoenix1998Lv6

Please update more author. One of the more interesting concept. The story is good. Cant wait for more.Please update more author. One of the more interesting concept. The story is good. Cant wait for more.

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