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2019-10-15 15:26

I really like this story. The only issue that I can think is that at the begins is too fast. The is not a specific reason for the sudden change in behave of the male lead. I read 40 chapter and I like the chimic between the protagonists, but everything is too fast. A second issue is the excessive dominance of the males character for not apparent reason. Anyway the story is cute and I like there is a twist about the original female lead. Overall a good lecture, but need a good editor.

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