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Kamlyn
KamlynLv145yr
2019-09-28 23:33

So I just read the first chapter and I must say, the story is well written. Though I don't like Sci-fi, but I would also say that to write, it's the most difficult genre, at least for me. And hats off to the author to try something out of the league. Because writing sci-fi needs immense knowledge I would say. Though it's not my kind of story but I will give it a try because sometimes, we should try different things too. And for sci-fi fans, I would say, just go for it. You won't regret it. It's very well written and you will enjoy reading it.

The Alterra Project

LordSputnik
4.6
130 Chs

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LordSputnik
LordSputnikAuthor

Appreciate it! I know I call it a Sci-fi, but I feel like in the latest chapters sci-fi is more just the setting for the story. I feel that the more I'm into the story, the easier it is to write as I just let the characters interact naturally in my mind. Not sure what you'd call that, maybe just plain crazy. :-D

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Kamlyn
KamlynLv14

I can understand what you're saying. Once you start writing something, you'll get use to it and once you get hold over something, then it will become easy to write. 😁

LordSputnik:Appreciate it! I know I call it a Sci-fi, but I feel like in the latest chapters sci-fi is more just the setting for the story. I feel that the more I'm into the story, the easier it is to write as I just let the characters interact naturally in my mind. Not sure what you'd call that, maybe just plain crazy. :-D
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Kaiser_Wilheim
Kaiser_WilheimLv3

Author, please remove my first review. After getting to this point I can honestly say you've improved significantly! I love the new characters, the world setting, the monty python references, even the songs surprised me! Great job and keep up the good work! I saw the twist coming at the end of the first volume but I can't see the twist you have planned, if any, for the second one, although you have hinted at something.

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LordSputnik
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This is my first novel on here so don't be gentle if you dislike it, but do be kind enough to inform me of why you dislike it. Also, yes, this is a shameless self review...

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Abdirah101
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Great read so far! I have being enjoying it, and it is in my library right now. I love the references you make, but tone it down a bit, huh? It does take away from the experience since it does pop up a LOT. There are grammar issues, though like I say we are not professionals with editors on hand and making a living out of it.

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Gray_Wilhelm
Gray_WilhelmLv2

It is about a mech game with more simulation than I've ever seen that is also the first and only full dive VR game. It seems I grow and change as a person, which is probably a good thing because I do realize I'm a bit immature for my age.

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MasterOfCouch
MasterOfCouchLv3

Everything is perfect. But I have to say, the story is a bit to slow and the author has to not go overboard with the filler. And I hope it does not go premium or else I need a pile of SS.

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Yurika_Winchester
Yurika_WinchesterLv1

Hmmm... While I do admit that I am quite biased to this story, I find it enjoyable to read about me since I'm like the hidden boss and real star of this novel!

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RedSonia
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One word: interesting. The nerdy guy who goes to the ‘nerdy store’ reminds me of Sheldon Cooper (just he goes to the comic store where owner/clerk is... strange). Lots of references and funny moments. It’s an easy read. I like that it does not start with a massive info-dump about the world, but the bits are embedded in the story and explained as necessary. The pacing is just right. There are some minor grammar issues, but they are not distracting or demanding that I read the paragraph few times in order to understand the story. Keep up the good work, author. 👍

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Geoff_Leray
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So, I am glad to see Gray is as easy going as I am. Gaming should be fun and easy going! Still, this story seems to involve much... much more than just gaming. It's almost like it's a novel not about gaming.

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LordSputnik
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Time to give myself an honest review after 100 chapters... Honest Review Thank you for starting to edit your first volume, "Foogle it" was honestly stupid as well as intentionally misspelling other pop culture references. The Good: Writing quality has improved dramatically as time has gone on, now usually I just see a word that is missed every now and then. The characters all feel believable and have been given enough life that many of them stand on their own. Gray may be the MC, but it feels like an ensemble cast instead of a sole MC. The Bad: Your story development is a bit slow, not always a bad thing, but we need a little bit more action. Your world building was good at first, but you've kinda fallen way off on this as time went on and we haven't really seen much of the world or even heard about it in awhile! The Neutral: Part of me wants a harem, part of me is glad you didn't go with one... Overall, it's better that you didn't as you've tried to focus more on realism. Needs more mechs also!

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