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SaltyPineapple
SaltyPineappleLv22yr
2023-02-16 09:07

The only reason you book isn't popular is because webnovel doesn't reward slow progression stories. I read only a few chapters and I already knew this book should warrant a place in the power ranking. Author is wasting his talent here. When you finish the book, please send it to a publisher. I would order the book online if this ever happens.

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Nick_Alderson
Nick_AldersonAuthor

Wow! Thanks for the kind words man, it means a great deal! My plan is to improve my writing over the course of the book, and then go back and raise the old parts up to the new standard, so hopefully as the book goes on, it should get even better. Thanks again :)

FoodReviewSnake
FoodReviewSnakeLv4

romance or no romance

Nick_Alderson:Wow! Thanks for the kind words man, it means a great deal! My plan is to improve my writing over the course of the book, and then go back and raise the old parts up to the new standard, so hopefully as the book goes on, it should get even better. Thanks again :)
Nick_Alderson
Nick_AldersonAuthor

ye there is some romance

FoodReviewSnake:romance or no romance
FoodReviewSnake
FoodReviewSnakeLv4

I don't like romance it ruins the story so, good luck with your novel hope your next one has no romance/harem and instead full focus on mc pursuit for power or eternal life

Nick_Alderson:ye there is some romance
Nick_Alderson
Nick_AldersonAuthor

ah, well, Beam is pretty much all about progress atm. He isn't dating anyone, and probably won't be for a long time. His main friend is a girl, so there's a romance tension there at times, but it isn't the focus of the story. idk if that meets your criteria

FoodReviewSnake:I don't like romance it ruins the story so, good luck with your novel hope your next one has no romance/harem and instead full focus on mc pursuit for power or eternal life
DukeFull
DukeFullLv14

“Friends” are just baggage that can be used and be thrown away when u are done with them as there is no such thing as a “friend” in front of death and power. Mc has to focus on himself and not have friends and if he does only use them to get to where he wants then leaves or kills them:)

Nick_Alderson:ah, well, Beam is pretty much all about progress atm. He isn't dating anyone, and probably won't be for a long time. His main friend is a girl, so there's a romance tension there at times, but it isn't the focus of the story. idk if that meets your criteria
Madmax_life
Madmax_lifeLv12

why dont you post on royal road the community there will like this book or do you a contract with webnovel

Nick_Alderson:Wow! Thanks for the kind words man, it means a great deal! My plan is to improve my writing over the course of the book, and then go back and raise the old parts up to the new standard, so hopefully as the book goes on, it should get even better. Thanks again :)
Nick_Alderson
Nick_AldersonAuthor

ah, i got it contracted a couple of months ago, but it's fineee, I'm chill with slowly building up an audience

Madmax_life:why dont you post on royal road the community there will like this book or do you a contract with webnovel
Daoist4Xw93W
Daoist4Xw93WLv13

This is such a dumb and mentally childish take that it makes me question if you have a brain or if you’re a 5-year-old. In the modern era, people like you never get anywhere in life, and this era is where people have the most amount of self-sufficiency and solo survival, and even in these times, we need others to be able to climb the ladder. The dumbest part is that you use this logic and put it on civilization, which would be during the Roman Empire where people had to group up together in order to survive as if a person got a sickness or infection, there was a high chance they would be dead and there was also the threat of bandits who were known for raping and killing civilians. So next time you comment, use that small brain—well, whatever’s left of it—at least to think a bit before spouting nonsense.

DukeFull:“Friends” are just baggage that can be used and be thrown away when u are done with them as there is no such thing as a “friend” in front of death and power. Mc has to focus on himself and not have friends and if he does only use them to get to where he wants then leaves or kills them:)
DukeFull
DukeFullLv14

O no did the retard get mad? I did not know you are the author of this novel commenting under

Daoist4Xw93W:This is such a dumb and mentally childish take that it makes me question if you have a brain or if you’re a 5-year-old. In the modern era, people like you never get anywhere in life, and this era is where people have the most amount of self-sufficiency and solo survival, and even in these times, we need others to be able to climb the ladder. The dumbest part is that you use this logic and put it on civilization, which would be during the Roman Empire where people had to group up together in order to survive as if a person got a sickness or infection, there was a high chance they would be dead and there was also the threat of bandits who were known for raping and killing civilians. So next time you comment, use that small brain—well, whatever’s left of it—at least to think a bit before spouting nonsense.
H20Pierce
H20PierceLv14

You're one messed up sad human. I hope you don't actually adhere to the ideology you spouted in your comment. It is a sad life not having friends amd family you can trust and rely on.

DukeFull:O no did the retard get mad? I did not know you are the author of this novel commenting under
RogueMM
RogueMMLv13

You're a clown. Let the author write what they want. Stop being entitled

FoodReviewSnake:I don't like romance it ruins the story so, good luck with your novel hope your next one has no romance/harem and instead full focus on mc pursuit for power or eternal life
machadogbc
machadogbcLv15

Will there be a partner or will the romance only be teased throughout the story?

Nick_Alderson:ah, well, Beam is pretty much all about progress atm. He isn't dating anyone, and probably won't be for a long time. His main friend is a girl, so there's a romance tension there at times, but it isn't the focus of the story. idk if that meets your criteria
Nick_Alderson
Nick_AldersonAuthor

Eventually there'll be one for sure, once the timings right and it's appropriate.

machadogbc:Will there be a partner or will the romance only be teased throughout the story?
Praxes1245
Praxes1245Lv14

That is your own opinion. Dont read it if you dont like romance

FoodReviewSnake:I don't like romance it ruins the story so, good luck with your novel hope your next one has no romance/harem and instead full focus on mc pursuit for power or eternal life
Praxes1245
Praxes1245Lv14

I think you should just give this book to a publisher Author. The story has a really slow in pacing, might as well print it into a book and sell it

MrHaogo
MrHaogoLv4

He said it was his own opinion ?? Even said good luck.

Praxes1245:That is your own opinion. Dont read it if you dont like romance
Praxes1245
Praxes1245Lv14

This one is a psycho. I bet you are a loner and dont have friends

DukeFull:“Friends” are just baggage that can be used and be thrown away when u are done with them as there is no such thing as a “friend” in front of death and power. Mc has to focus on himself and not have friends and if he does only use them to get to where he wants then leaves or kills them:)
JayScribe
JayScribeLv14

Did this work out for you? I am asking as a fellow (noob) author. I just like the chill you have in this comment.

Nick_Alderson:ah, i got it contracted a couple of months ago, but it's fineee, I'm chill with slowly building up an audience
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