What a waste of time. I was going to drop by the third chapter but I still went to all the pain until the sixth chapter Grammar is ok? I am not an native so I can't really say that, but I can ,however, say that there are a lot of typos Since I finished the third chap all the flags were already raised: Mc is rich, handsome and has a good relationship whit it's parents, apparently the author forced what he wanted to be in the mc, witch indicates immaturity of the author Mc has a system Unlimited points Personality is the Chinese cultivation xianxia cliche, the type who cut weeds from the root and determined, without reason whatsoever Edgy scenes, which the author seems to incorporate an **** that thinks his eye it's a key to chaos I think that's enough *If you disagree, be the author or just disagree with me, let's discuss, I would love to change your opinion
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Ah ha ha yeah this is my first time writing so some of the plots might be forced or immature and English is not my first language so there might be some typos. It is a wish fulfillment type of fanfic so it might have been a bit edgy haha. I'm trying to use grammerly to make up for that. All in all thank you for the review.
Grammerly to make up for the typos I mean
Aldunhokoron:Ah ha ha yeah this is my first time writing so some of the plots might be forced or immature and English is not my first language so there might be some typos. It is a wish fulfillment type of fanfic so it might have been a bit edgy haha. I'm trying to use grammerly to make up for that. All in all thank you for the review.
First, use grammarly, he is essential to writers who has problems with typos and general grammar Second, godlike powers and different anime skills really kill of the premise of AOT, i don't have a problem with op MC's, but that is just way more than you should make them MC's personality doesn't have any sense whatsoever: He was spoiled but became a good kid; He "cut weeds through the root" And he is determined Because of...? What? What are the reasons to that? I know that is hard to write stories but dude Maybe an rewrite would be cool , but first you need to make at least 30-40 chapters to gain experience
Aldunhokoron:Ah ha ha yeah this is my first time writing so some of the plots might be forced or immature and English is not my first language so there might be some typos. It is a wish fulfillment type of fanfic so it might have been a bit edgy haha. I'm trying to use grammerly to make up for that. All in all thank you for the review.
My review basically hypothesized this exact outcome . Makes me glad I didn't tarnish the image I have of the beautiful world of AOT.
Lol yeah his personality.......I was thinking of adding his background later on but I guess him being like that at first is weird haha.......and for the god like powers.......I just made it so that he can over come anything and not receive some set back, a bit of set back but not too serious. I was tired of reading MCs who are weak and got set backs and couldn't do something and later on with some stupid luck or miracle they somehow overcome it.
Mytaw:First, use grammarly, he is essential to writers who has problems with typos and general grammar Second, godlike powers and different anime skills really kill of the premise of AOT, i don't have a problem with op MC's, but that is just way more than you should make them MC's personality doesn't have any sense whatsoever: He was spoiled but became a good kid; He "cut weeds through the root" And he is determined Because of...? What? What are the reasons to that? I know that is hard to write stories but dude Maybe an rewrite would be cool , but first you need to make at least 30-40 chapters to gain experience
i still havent read youre fan fic but i agree with what you said about the weak little ****ty mc who at the beggining could have great power but sadly didnt train their power so when enemies come or hurdles they are weak as shits im tired of that
Aldunhokoron:Lol yeah his personality.......I was thinking of adding his background later on but I guess him being like that at first is weird haha.......and for the god like powers.......I just made it so that he can over come anything and not receive some set back, a bit of set back but not too serious. I was tired of reading MCs who are weak and got set backs and couldn't do something and later on with some stupid luck or miracle they somehow overcome it.
Thanks for the review, got to unlimited points and on to the next novel.
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What are you speaks about?, this is a good novel and the novel have it's own charm. Please read it to the end and comment after. This is a good novel.
Please don't force your ideal to the author by talking sh*t to them, because you knows that he created his AOT is through his blood and sweat, and please don't forget that it's a fanfic, fan fiction is a story with many things that got augmented. If you dislike the power of another anime than you should go f*cking your self.
Mytaw:First, use grammarly, he is essential to writers who has problems with typos and general grammar Second, godlike powers and different anime skills really kill of the premise of AOT, i don't have a problem with op MC's, but that is just way more than you should make them MC's personality doesn't have any sense whatsoever: He was spoiled but became a good kid; He "cut weeds through the root" And he is determined Because of...? What? What are the reasons to that? I know that is hard to write stories but dude Maybe an rewrite would be cool , but first you need to make at least 30-40 chapters to gain experience
Opinions appear to hurt worse than sticks and stones ^
The MC Will have a girlfriend/Wife or Harém?
Aldunhokoron:Ah ha ha yeah this is my first time writing so some of the plots might be forced or immature and English is not my first language so there might be some typos. It is a wish fulfillment type of fanfic so it might have been a bit edgy haha. I'm trying to use grammerly to make up for that. All in all thank you for the review.
Three girls as his girlfriends and future wives.
Melshan:The MC Will have a girlfriend/Wife or Harém?
I'm writing an Attack on Titan novel and it would help me a lot if you read it. Name: Infinite Worlds: Attack on Titan
