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DumplingJr
DumplingJrLv55yr
2019-11-08 04:42

Ok since no one is saying it I will, the Grammar is absolutely atrocious I tried reading the first chapter I felt like I was losing brain cells, and thats all I can say because I dont feel like losing brain cells because of this atrocity against the grammar gods.

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blablador
blabladorAuthor

yea but this is the best i can do so people has to just deal with it

WeepingCarp
WeepingCarpLv12

Readers :cant read it because of grammar Author : deal with it

blablador:yea but this is the best i can do so people has to just deal with it
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Demiurge_Ohara
Demiurge_OharaLv12

Bland, Boring and may give you a high blood due to frustration. The Mc is an Idiot who have a weak will. Cannot stomach killing humans but A okay with other species. Racist. Poor decision making and easily manipulated. Has a slave for a master. Who's his master is a slave from a princess. And a princess who works from a guild. Not a castle. Why she's still alive I have no Idea. Apparently she have plot armor to avoid assasins bull ****. The emotions are bland, boring or forced. Author has no knowledge of Politics, Geography, Physics, Real world, Deception etc. I can guess that you are a new Author so I'll give you a tip. Rational self inserts are well-written self inserts solely because they don't break reader's immersion. You self-insert yourself into the SI fanfic imagining what would you do in the self-insert's shoes. They need to be realistic. We need to be realistic. Think about it. You are reading a story where a guy is reincarnated/transmigrated to a foreign universe and the first thing they do is freak out. That's good. That is a normal human reaction from getting cosmically kidnapped from one world to another, especially a fantasy world you read manga about. But the next thing they do defines whether the self insert fanfic is rational or not, or I would like to say whether the fanfic is well-written or wish fulfilment trash. Does the self insert... Have fun carelessly exploring and trying out their new magical powers? Plan on meeting and befriending the canon characters? Instantly befriend the main canon characters through their apparent godlike social skills? Easily create a harem with their reincarnated good looks or otherworldly transmigrated visage? Instantly become a genius in the mystical arts without no hard training whatsoever? Constantly allude to knowledge and idiom they should not have and better yet, with the canon characters not questioning, calling out, or noticing this strange behavior? Save someone that they know is going to die if they don't do anything without thinking of the butterflied consequences? Congratulations. If the self insert fanfic you are reading answers yes to one or two of the following questions the SI you are reading is not rational. It's wish fulfilment trash. The next realistic and rational thing the self insert should do is Survive. The self insert should plan and secure their survival. This is their new life now. This is our new life now. This is not a game or one of the mangas we read pre-insert. The fiction you and the self insert read is now reality and we should treat it as such. If the SI was reincarnated, they don't have to worry as much compared to being inexplicably transmigrated. They have no identity, money, and shelter so they better be taking their situation seriously. It is after-all, our new life now. And if the SI got where they were by a ROB(random omnipotent being), I wouldn't be reading that Self-insert fanfic anyway because ROBs are trash and they ruin stories. The Mc's like that doesn't even deserve the power as they didn't have the right mind set. Or maybe this was just a wish fulfillment? Or you can just ignore my tips.

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