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JustBearmace
JustBearmaceLv135yr
2019-08-05 17:12

Ok, it’s not the best for three reasons the authors use of grammar could have been better, and second made his character have to much affinity’s making it more complicated than it should have been. Lastly he called naruto a cartoon as an otaku I’d like to say f*** ***, naruto was for one made by a Japanese man and is not comparable to cartoons made by Americans.

Shinobi in a world of magic

SengokuBangloi
4.2
30 Chs

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JustBearmace
JustBearmaceLv13

Has* instead of have

5yr
SengokuBangloi
SengokuBangloiAuthor

Listen it wasn't me who called it that. To an all powerful 'God' what difference does it make to him? I just let him say that as his own way of belittling creation which is part of his character. Yep you are right, that my grammar could be much better, but I'm no major in English language and I don't consider myself a professional writer. Also your point on affinities is right on the most part, since I'm not making the MC practice some, but that's because he already has affinity for the more powerful kekkei genkai why use weaker ones? That usually only happens when there is say that the MC has a system and needs to make do with his credits. Though I've tried to give reasons which maybe written off as excuses, I hope you still enjoyed the story! Thank you for your review and will try to limit my mistakes and make sure it would be a pleasure to read for people with as distinguished tastes such as yours.

5yr
JustBearmace
JustBearmaceLv13

Just get a proof reader*

5yr
JustBearmace
JustBearmaceLv13

“That was god who said it” is definitely an excuse btw, you are the author and cannot just push that off to your creation like that.

5yr
SengokuBangloi
SengokuBangloiAuthor

True I could make the MC have a slight protest in 'God's' categorization to appeal to cultured men and women such as you, but I can only say 'that's just how it is and how it will be'.

JustBearmace:“That was god who said it” is definitely an excuse btw, you are the author and cannot just push that off to your creation like that.
5yr
SengokuBangloi
SengokuBangloiAuthor

If it is a person, I just can't be bothered. However I might get grammarly or similar programs to get better grammar, but for now, again, 'I just can't be bothered'.

JustBearmace:Just get a proof reader*
5yr
JonToBreak
JonToBreakLv5

Cartoon and anime is the same, if some people want to give a different to the words ok... but dont force all people to believe it. Cartoon = anime Comic = Manga Onii-chan = Big brother Please, use english even if u want to be a fanboy, don't force others, thanks.

5yr
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JustBearmace
JustBearmaceLv13

I have my opinion and you have yours, all I’m saying is anime is a term used by Japanese, while cartoons is a term used be westerners. So obviously because the “anime” was made by a Japanese person, I’ll respect his craft by obviously using his terms. By the way your not a true fan 🤷🏼‍♂️

JonToBreak:Cartoon and anime is the same, if some people want to give a different to the words ok... but dont force all people to believe it. Cartoon = anime Comic = Manga Onii-chan = Big brother Please, use english even if u want to be a fanboy, don't force others, thanks.
5yr
JustBearmace
JustBearmaceLv13

I have my opinion and you have yours, all I’m saying is anime is a term used by Japanese, while cartoons is a term used be westerners. So obviously because the “anime” was made by a Japanese person, I’ll respect his craft by obviously using his terms. By the way your not a true fan 🤷🏼‍♂️

JonToBreak:Cartoon and anime is the same, if some people want to give a different to the words ok... but dont force all people to believe it. Cartoon = anime Comic = Manga Onii-chan = Big brother Please, use english even if u want to be a fanboy, don't force others, thanks.
5yr
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

you tell em bru,....no one insults anime!

4yr
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