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Abewan
AbewanLv105yr
2019-10-01 15:46

Didn't expect a dungeon novel to be this good. The story is basically about dungeon management with game element but the twist here is the player isn't the one controlling the dungeon but the other way around.

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Abewan
AbewanLv10

The players didn't know they were used as slave labor.

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ArchDenis
ArchDenisLv5

Hello everyone! This novel has some major flaws. In my opinion, the greatest flaw is unrealistic gamers and lots of small flaws due to that. List of core flaws: 1) I would like to notice that gamers are not playing closed beta. Closed beta is a paid job where people are testing everything to find bugs. Closed beta testers can not post anything or disclose any information. We can let it slide thou, there are different companies out there. Untested game capsules from unknown game company... aren't it insanely suspicious? 2) In this novel people are complaining about bugs which is quite strange. For example WOW has bugs after each new update (since vanilla till BFA ^^ ), which is common for such huge game, and people are complaining and insult developers *in beta* ... aren't it absurd? Same for servers maintance. 3) People are not worried about lack of feedback and support mechanisms (again it is BETA testing!) 4) People are offering money for in game currency. 4.1) Looking at insane prices, real testers would have submited a report and wait while all prices would have been reduced (like in most betas). 4.2) In all betas that I know, all beta progress stays in beta, and real game is real game. 4.3) It is BETA, you do not play it, you test a game. 5) It is BETA testing! Developers ask for beta testing, not players. Most gamers can not play for more then 2 hours per day, and even those who can, usually refuse to play unrefined games. So thousands beta requests is kinda... Basic minor flaws are from biology. Let us take for granted that goblin is equal in strenght to a common human male. If human mine ore, excavate stone, cut something, etc he get bruises and small cuts. Without gloves even tough skinned man can not really mine or drag something without inflicting self damage. And now let us remember that tools are rude and have no handle... So goblins are tough as hell (more like made from steel ^^ ) or Demon Lord heals them every 2-3 hours (or they will just bleed to death). I can continue, but this review is already far too long. Thank you for your time and have a great day!

David_Drake
David_DrakeLv4

I've read up to chapter 549. The story so far is entertaining. You have epic battles, a smart MC and an interesting plot that unfolds over time. However, there is a few deal breakers. There is a disgusting amount of misunderstandings in this fic. It gets to the point that its so unbelievable that it becomes another form of plot armor. Then we got reoccurring themes. Where a battle happens, the demons are losing until the MC and his immortal army swoops in. They then proceed to steal everything, get over whelming praise for their 'sacrifices', before the gamers start to ask everyone for a mysterious quest and the MC tells a sob story for cash. This repeats itself every freaking time no matter what small arc or scenario that occurs. And finally, the thing I hate the most is how in Beta version 1.0, they have 50million people joining. What happen to it being only 50thousand? The author forgot about what he said and goes into great detail on how only the chineses are allowed to play the game and the westerners are crying about the unfairness. The westerns tried to reverse engineer the gaming capsule but they couldn't do it. Now they have to sit at home and watch the glorious chinese having fun. 'Its kinda obvious what this is hinting too' Besides all these issues, this fic is a nice time sinker. It is above the other chinese fics and on par with the gamer fics from korea. Give it a try and you'll enjoy it. Now a few issues I have with the plot. First, all the gamers are naked savages. Second, there is no defined form of leadership/control over the gamers. Third, the MC doesn't recruit anybody to his dungeon to fight for him it is only the chaotic gamers. Fourth, there is alot of foreshadowing of the MC, but nothing is ever explained until the author just wants to add random stuff to his backstory on a whim. Finally, there is no character growth what so ever.

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