Item: The Opening Shot
Rating: 4.6
Author: KuyaImbo

KuyaImboLv11yr

2024-01-22 14:12

hello! first of all i want to thank the author for sharing this wonderful story to us. been a fun read. so, as i read through the story, here the things i will say: about the writing quality, there are some spelling errors now and then, but it is not enough to affect the overall reading experience. it is also understandable to have those mistakes because you were just a new writer back then, however, i saw the significant improvement as the story progresses, i hope you can continue the pace the story development is good, there are no boring moments and its chapter builds up excitement, that's what im looking for in a story i couldnt say much about the character design and update stability because im only just in the early chapters, so i give them 5 stars. the world background was addressed in chapter 7 onwards, and it was mentioned well overall, the story is good. no boring parts and every chapter gives a sense of excitement for the readers. i hope you keep up the good work author

The Opening Shot

Kari_Chan

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Kari_ChanAuthor

Thank you so much for this review. you are right about my older chapters having more spelling issues than my newer ones. I also appreciate you being understanding because when I first wrote this story, I was fresh and brand new. my newer chapters are actually written much better, and I want to continue to make even more improvements. ❤️ and I hope you continue reading and the excitement still carries you.

1yr

KuyaImboLv1

keep up the good work, author!!!

Kari_Chan:Thank you so much for this review. you are right about my older chapters having more spelling issues than my newer ones. I also appreciate you being understanding because when I first wrote this story, I was fresh and brand new. my newer chapters are actually written much better, and I want to continue to make even more improvements. ❤️ and I hope you continue reading and the excitement still carries you.

1yr

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