Review Detail of Jeysss in Land Warrior: Discontinued
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So here's my take on the story: It's actually pretty decent. I'm not saying it's perfect, but it's one of those that really stood out to me more than the typical stuff you see in this platform. At the start of the chapter, I admit, I wasn't too immersed when I first came in (with some poor sentences here and there) -but holy hell did the later parts did. The events unfolding, the battles at each front, the ambushes -it felt like the author really knows what he was doing, like he has this mini-map within his brain telling him of all the positions both sides were in. For me, it's not the "next big thing," but it doesn't have to be. The story is good and solid. The characters, such as Jose and the many soldiers, really feel real. I can also tell of you're enthusiasm in writing this story. I mean, not many writers opt for a war simulation kind of novel, and it's not really that popular, but you wrote it anyways. I tip my hat to you, Mr. Author, for crafting a solid story.
Land Warrior: Discontinued
Allen_Clay012
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Thank you for your remarks. About the grammar I am really struggling to find a way around it. So far, I am still here, still struggling hehehe... I am really inspired about alternate universes and all that stuff. Ace Combat really gave me most of the inspirations in the story. It has real world elements but the settings and all are different. I wish to create a world similar that's why I based the setting to our country. I shall do my best in the next chapters and I am glad you enjoyed the story so far.
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Allen_Clay012:Thank you for your remarks. About the grammar I am really struggling to find a way around it. So far, I am still here, still struggling hehehe... I am really inspired about alternate universes and all that stuff. Ace Combat really gave me most of the inspirations in the story. It has real world elements but the settings and all are different. I wish to create a world similar that's why I based the setting to our country. I shall do my best in the next chapters and I am glad you enjoyed the story so far.