Review Detail of Namake in Land Warrior: Discontinued

Writing Quality: 2/5 There were many grammar errors throughout this. I believe they can be improved upon, but as a native English speaker, I found them distracting. It took a good deal of effort to read past these. The main issues are punctuation as well as tense shifting. That said, for Webnovel, I believe this isn't anything too abnormal. Stability of Updates: 5/5 I don't comment on this. Story Development: 4/5 The first chapter is well paced. Introduces the characters, providing just enough information to allow the reader to visualize the scene. The action comes in at just the right time, as well, propelling the plot forward. Character Design: 3/5 The characters are varied, which is great. That said, I don't get a sense anything particularly unique about them from the beginning. I think some more fleshing out or description beyond just physical characteristics would go a long way to adding life to them. World Background: 4/5 The world is intriguing, and there are hints at the beginning that make you as a reader ask questions about the place. I think that's a good thing. Overall, 3.6/5. I had to stop at chapter 2 because of the writing quality, but if you can get past that, or if the author improves the grammar, I think this would be a good read.