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2023-03-17 05:36

alright, first off the amount of plot holes is just astounding the author said that this is a heavy AU but that still doesn't excuse the number of plot holes created by his deviation from the source material, second, i ran into some grammatical errors but they weren't so many as to be a reason to cross out this fic completely the writing is not unreadable so to say it's just that there are some parts that might need some polishing, however, my real problem with the writing and character design is how the author portrayed the character's conversations, for the most part they just sound robotic with no real "life" if that makes sense and half the stuff they say is either chunni or is something you'd expect a xianxia Chinese character to say

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Well... I'm bored so let's do a review of this novel according to my opinion. First, the development of the mc background and the world is pretty good with the interactions between characters that are not too rigid, which makes my opinion go up a bit with this fanfic. Second, in world background building adding boost in Things like Cultivation in the Magic World wasn't very good because Magic actually had more potential than Cultivation. Although Cultivation Novels were the first path I stepped on in the world of novels, I have to agree with some of the opinion of the reviewers in this fanfic that taking the path of cultivation after magic is not the right step. As for Magic has a greater potential in the story compared to cultivation, because cultivation itself is a lazy writer's step in making steps to form the power of the mc itself, because in many cultivation novels that I read, cultivation is like a ladder through which we can walk. step our feet from the bottom to the top of the stairs just by following the path of the stairs, while magic has a lot of potential for story development than cultivation which in my opinion is very monotonous where we only need time, luck, and sit in a place where a lot of energy is collected and cultivated. whereas magic couldn't do that because magic users couldn't just sit there waiting to break through that limit, magic required a huge amount of theory and complexity to take power to the next level. that's all my opinion about this novel after reading 100+ chapters, this novel is not good but also not bad, just average for someone like me who likes mc which requires complicated mind and theory to grow his strength. maybe a little suggestion for writers about novels where mc which I think is good to be an example like [DxD : Annihalation Maker, Holy Right : Ocultist in Multiverse, and E. P. I. C] that all three are very good at developing strength and personality in mc.

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