Review Detail of Zehell2218 in Synthetic Survivor: Machine Age

the plot is unique it's a plus point for this but I wonder why in chapter 2 it use 'I' but later use 3'rd person POV? Also simple suggestion since I read this in app, the paragraph made is too long. It's quite uncomfortable reading it so please cut down the paragraph into short one. Grammar is ok it can be edited but please try not to only add 'He asked', 'he said', 'he answered' u can use variety to conversation as not to make it boring. Keep it up u got potential!