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ILLYAchan
ILLYAchanLv55yr
2019-07-25 16:28

This novel is very different to other stories but it took my attention and I'm curious what would happen next! Anyway, the writing quality of this story is good however there is some grammatical errors but I think the author is doing his best to improve the writing quality of the novel. I think the author focuses on the details in agriculture and this would be more interesting if there are some scenes about the main character's background and other supporting characters (and why they are in an agriculture field) while introducing agriculture to the readers. In that way, the readers would be familiar with agriculture knowledge instead of forgetting the terms while reading throughout the story. Although, I'm still on chapter 3 so I still don't know about the next chapters. But that's just my suggestion and it would be always the decision of the author how would their novel would turn out to be. Good luck author! Will continue to read this story. :)

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Gourmet_DAO
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Thank you so much, for your review and interesting thoughts, I think it makes sense to go back and tell about the experience in agriculture. It would be more exciting. Unless of course the author manages to change his style. Go from a more documentary presentation to a more lively, more emotional, get away from the details and talk more about the characters themselves. I'll think about how this can be done. Many thanks to the reviewer for a new idea, I will try to implement it! With appreciation

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NotUse
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Writing Quality -There is consistency when it comes to vivid descriptions. (I've said it in the chapter comments but I'll say it here too:)) -I have no right to tell whether this book has typos or errors when it comes to grammar since I'm not good at grammar as well. -I didn't notice any misspelled words/terms -Well for me, the writing style has caught my attention Stability of update -It looks like that the author updates daily since it says that this book has been recently updated 19hrs ago World background -I have no complaints when it comes to this category. -The world background is amazing, there are instances wherein the author uses facts and trivia (Well they sound like facts to me so I'm assuming they are) Character Development -I love the characteristics of the characters, but by far Dara is my favorite -The author describes the characters in a vivid way, giving readers an easier time to imagine how they look. Story Development -It doesn't seem to be rushed nor does it seem to be slow. The novel has a perfect pace. -Despite the long chapters, there are paragraphs that motivates the readers to continue reading. Overall: The story is unique. I highly recommend this novel to those who have a passion for cooking or for those who excel in agriculture. Those who aren't that good with cooking and agriculture, however, I still suggest them to read this novel since they can learn a lot from this book. The author updates lately so the readers won't be left behind. The author has also profound knowledge when it comes to the economy, recipes, and agriculture. I am not very observant on grammar, so I can't really say if there are typos or errors. Anyways, keep up the good work author!

Fiona_Singer
Fiona_SingerLv3

I wouldn't really call this work a novel or fiction, but a documentary--even though the characters, the plots, the stage where it all happened are made up and semi-fictional, it is distinctively written in documental style, like someone is filming MC's career as a farmer for academic purpose: because you can read everything MC thought and every step he took as detailedly as possible, to the degree that you will know the exact weight of each agricultural product. It reminds me of the business cases I read in college: realistic, narrative records that take down all the information about how people start their business and make decisions that is useful in a business research sense. That's my general impression of this book, a business case about a farming enterprenuer in fictional world. Which leads me to the problems. Obviously, you have to give credits to author's extraordinary knowledge of an amazingly wide range of subjects--It's rare and exciting, as a Chinese myself, to see someone who's so familiar with our culture. This requires a great amount of research, something that only someone with the spirit of old-time naturalists and a pure, noble curiosity can achieve. However, the core nature of novel--this form of literature work--is drama, theatricality, conflicts, suspense, which is something this book is lacking. The author focuses too much on presenting the details and knowledge in a way as realistic as possible, that he seems to forget he's writing a novel and telling a story to his readers, instead of making a research report to a group of scholars. And though I sense this may contradict with the author's ideology of writing, to make the story dramatic, theatrical, gripping, one has to rely on exaggeration and distortion, which means to some degree, to "disrespect" reality and knowledge. A novelist may omit something that does not serve a role in the plots and burden the pace of story progress, even if it's scientific and educational, and may add something that increases the intense of conflicts and the uniqueness of characters, even if it's totally meaningless in reality. The story always comes first. Certainly, reality also plays a significant role in this, but its function--to use a metaphor of stage show scenario--is like the costumes and accessories the actors wear to make them look closer to the characters they play, the props, paintings and murals used on the background to give the audience a feeling of immersion, and actors' vivid, lively expressions and tunes to convince the viewers their emotions are real, so real that even the viewers will deeply sympathize with them, and cry or laugh. The status of reality in novels is always an honored guest in the house that makes the party cooler, but not the host, and that's the case even in realistic novels. So what I am suggesting is that the author either changes his direction into a completely realistic, documentary area--e.g. it will be very interesting for me to read about how author himself travels into different countries and learn about all sorts of rare knowledge of local cultures and his thoughts of it; or tries harder on the "novel" part of the novel. I would recommend the first one much more personally, because I have the impression that the author has an evident researcher personality, so the first one would be a better fit for your nature XD

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