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Wayward_Scholar
Wayward_ScholarLv25yr
2019-10-30 05:43

While I am not a huge fan of historical agriculture, as a whole the idea behind the novel is pretty good and unique. There are plenty of facts scattered throughout the novel that one can relate to in real life. There is also a lot of effort put in towards the development of the main character Dara and world around him as well. There is a ton of detail put into Dara's reactions and thoughts throughout the novel which allows the reader to get a good grasp on his personality. The main con that I would find in this novel however, is grammar. Some of the grammar makes the novel a bit confusing and the documentary-like style it is written in can make it hard to understand when your first starting out. Lastly, while I like effort put into detail, I feel like there's a bit too much. Maybe the author corrected these things in future updates that I did not catch up to, but if the author has time they could edit the initial chapters a bit to make it more accessible to newer readers.

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Gourmet_DAO
Gourmet_DAOAuthor

Thanks for the honest criticism, the author will pay attention to this. Now we need to think about how to reduce excessive detail and make the text more simple. Could you advise how to do this? Something to remove, something to add? With thanks

Wayward_Scholar
Wayward_ScholarLv2

Hmm. I guess one thing I found in chapter 3 was that you could cut down on the listing a bit. Alot of the time your listing a bunch of things to emphasize your topic. You can do this for some topics, but for some I think it's good enough just to use one example. Otherwise keep on writing! According to the ratings your doing a great job already!

Gourmet_DAO:Thanks for the honest criticism, the author will pay attention to this. Now we need to think about how to reduce excessive detail and make the text more simple. Could you advise how to do this? Something to remove, something to add? With thanks
Gourmet_DAO
Gourmet_DAOAuthor

Thank you for your advice! I will take it into account when writing new chapters, and I will rewrite Roan already at its completion. In order not to disappoint readers who are already used to my incomplete text. But I understand that you have pointed out an important error that needs to be fixed. With thanks,

Wayward_Scholar:Hmm. I guess one thing I found in chapter 3 was that you could cut down on the listing a bit. Alot of the time your listing a bunch of things to emphasize your topic. You can do this for some topics, but for some I think it's good enough just to use one example. Otherwise keep on writing! According to the ratings your doing a great job already!
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NotUse
NotUseLv4

Writing Quality -There is consistency when it comes to vivid descriptions. (I've said it in the chapter comments but I'll say it here too:)) -I have no right to tell whether this book has typos or errors when it comes to grammar since I'm not good at grammar as well. -I didn't notice any misspelled words/terms -Well for me, the writing style has caught my attention Stability of update -It looks like that the author updates daily since it says that this book has been recently updated 19hrs ago World background -I have no complaints when it comes to this category. -The world background is amazing, there are instances wherein the author uses facts and trivia (Well they sound like facts to me so I'm assuming they are) Character Development -I love the characteristics of the characters, but by far Dara is my favorite -The author describes the characters in a vivid way, giving readers an easier time to imagine how they look. Story Development -It doesn't seem to be rushed nor does it seem to be slow. The novel has a perfect pace. -Despite the long chapters, there are paragraphs that motivates the readers to continue reading. Overall: The story is unique. I highly recommend this novel to those who have a passion for cooking or for those who excel in agriculture. Those who aren't that good with cooking and agriculture, however, I still suggest them to read this novel since they can learn a lot from this book. The author updates lately so the readers won't be left behind. The author has also profound knowledge when it comes to the economy, recipes, and agriculture. I am not very observant on grammar, so I can't really say if there are typos or errors. Anyways, keep up the good work author!

Fiona_Singer
Fiona_SingerLv3

I wouldn't really call this work a novel or fiction, but a documentary--even though the characters, the plots, the stage where it all happened are made up and semi-fictional, it is distinctively written in documental style, like someone is filming MC's career as a farmer for academic purpose: because you can read everything MC thought and every step he took as detailedly as possible, to the degree that you will know the exact weight of each agricultural product. It reminds me of the business cases I read in college: realistic, narrative records that take down all the information about how people start their business and make decisions that is useful in a business research sense. That's my general impression of this book, a business case about a farming enterprenuer in fictional world. Which leads me to the problems. Obviously, you have to give credits to author's extraordinary knowledge of an amazingly wide range of subjects--It's rare and exciting, as a Chinese myself, to see someone who's so familiar with our culture. This requires a great amount of research, something that only someone with the spirit of old-time naturalists and a pure, noble curiosity can achieve. However, the core nature of novel--this form of literature work--is drama, theatricality, conflicts, suspense, which is something this book is lacking. The author focuses too much on presenting the details and knowledge in a way as realistic as possible, that he seems to forget he's writing a novel and telling a story to his readers, instead of making a research report to a group of scholars. And though I sense this may contradict with the author's ideology of writing, to make the story dramatic, theatrical, gripping, one has to rely on exaggeration and distortion, which means to some degree, to "disrespect" reality and knowledge. A novelist may omit something that does not serve a role in the plots and burden the pace of story progress, even if it's scientific and educational, and may add something that increases the intense of conflicts and the uniqueness of characters, even if it's totally meaningless in reality. The story always comes first. Certainly, reality also plays a significant role in this, but its function--to use a metaphor of stage show scenario--is like the costumes and accessories the actors wear to make them look closer to the characters they play, the props, paintings and murals used on the background to give the audience a feeling of immersion, and actors' vivid, lively expressions and tunes to convince the viewers their emotions are real, so real that even the viewers will deeply sympathize with them, and cry or laugh. The status of reality in novels is always an honored guest in the house that makes the party cooler, but not the host, and that's the case even in realistic novels. So what I am suggesting is that the author either changes his direction into a completely realistic, documentary area--e.g. it will be very interesting for me to read about how author himself travels into different countries and learn about all sorts of rare knowledge of local cultures and his thoughts of it; or tries harder on the "novel" part of the novel. I would recommend the first one much more personally, because I have the impression that the author has an evident researcher personality, so the first one would be a better fit for your nature XD

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