Review Detail of UnjustlyUnderpaid in Son Of Oceanus: Land Of Melee

Your new novel isn’t bad but the text walls are still a bit large. Try to split hen up more often. The grammar is s but funky especially with capitalization and comma usage. For examole there were lots of words starting off sentences that were uncapitalized, and words like “I” was uncapitalized as well. There were some comma usage in places that didn’t need them and commas missing in places that definitely needed them. The length is nice, not too long and not too short so that’s a good thing. The concept seems pretty interesting thus far but the speech text is a bit hard to read. Maybe try having dialogue in a paragraph by itself instead of right in the middle of a paragraph, this will make it easier to read. And add more descriptions to some of the important settings, objects, and scenes. What you have now is good but there is some imagery that is missing.