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2019-05-30 23:01

The author's prose is quite simple but attractive, the sentences flowing smoothly. There are only a couple of minor errors that will not alienate readers from their reading flow. The author also does a good job when mixing paragraphs of the characters with informative segments. As for the rate of updates, it looks pretty constant so far. The story progresses slowly but surely at the moment. Just past half of the chapters published so far (and especially two thirds into it) the main conflict begins to unravel, as the story focused initially on introducing multiple characters throughout each chapter. Perhaps the author could have allowed herself to leave certain segments of his characters for later, or perhaps she could have intermixed them more with the plot itself so that it would have progressed more effectively. As for the characters, I have to give credit to the author. Considering that she had to focus on so many at the same time, they are all quite well-fleshed-out, written and portrayed convincingly so that readers can connect to them properly. The fictional universe, perhaps, is the greatest strength in this story. The plot remains within realistic margins for much of its stretch (I read that the author had to change from "realistic" to "science" fiction, and I certainly understand the reason). A lot of what I've read so far is focused on a group of students camping, and the author certainly knows how to make you feel part of that experience, from minor details to the exploration of nature itself. In general terms, this is a rather compelling slow-paced and character-driven story for nature lovers and readers looking for more grounded, adventure-themed sci-fi stories.

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Thanks for the review. Yes, there are a few typographical errors. Will sit down and do the corrections asap.

RenuKakkar
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As regards simple English, it is so that everyone can read and enjoy without taxing their brain.

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