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Daoist59SpNN
Daoist59SpNNLv14yr
2020-10-16 09:03

Author, you need to fix the writing quality. There are a lot of grammar errors which is painful to see. It's sad because the story is really good, I love Mogranius so far so please feature him more, fix the errors Author.

ELECTUS - A tale of Peaceful Demons.

MisterE05
4.5
510 Chs

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bibiyenini
bibiyeniniLv3

Reveal spoiler

4yr

MisterE05
MisterE05Author

Author's honest review! This novel, isn't the best. Each aspect of it demands work and be sure that I'm giving it my all to meet the requirements. The first volume for example, has undergone the most work and yet it needs more. Furthermore, the rest of the volumes carry different characteristics which shed light to proper world building, characters and problems that we can give the label of, different. The beginning can admittedly be a drag, but it gets better every chapter at a time, volume 4 breaks the normal with a plot that I am certain no one had ever used before. But now we can put a lot of value to volume 9, whom carries heavy scenes itself and a lot of experiments I have been making with plots. I'm putting everything gathered up through my 1 million word career as an author, to assure that volume 9 is my best one yet and rest assured that the 10th will be even better. Furthermore I'd like to state that this novel is the root of an entire franchise, the goal is to make 30 prequels out of it, which is a goal that isn't hard to tackle but requires one thing, time. As for repetitive content, you don't have to fear it. Be it on a preqeul or on this novel, the goal is something new for every volume. I'm concerned about your time and money as much as you are, after all, I don't want to rob anyone blind. So if you can look over the odd ends of this novel, you will be blessed with the opportunity of finding something new. Thank you for making it all the way down here, - MisterE05

4yr
Reda_7271
Reda_7271Lv1

FLIPPING LOVE THIS BOOK AND THE WAY YOU WRITE. It doesn't even look like a fiction world because of how well you explained everything in it.

5yr
XOMatsumaeohana
XOMatsumaeohanaLv15

Review Swap Valid For Chapter 30 Writing Quality: The writing quality for this actually isn't bad. There's still a lot that can be improved on, but it's readable and flows. Just a few suggestions. • Chapter 1: - Deep down --> remove the - • Chapter 3: all the remaining wolves were on fire (literally) --> I don't think you need the bracket 🤔 You could phrase it differently like -- "The remaining wolves were literally on fire." Make it part of the sentence rather than separate it. A few grammatical errors,---> h--how did you survive. I thought you would be dead by now" --->change to (")H-how did you survive, I thought you would be dead by now(.)" • Capital letters when you start a new sentence and use words like "I" should always be in capital. • Try to avoid using random brackets in your sentences. • When a character is shouting don't capitalize your letters. You can use actions to emphasis yelling like --> using words like shouted, exclaimed loudly etc. In chapter 4 you already used the word shouted so there's no need to capitalize the word what. • When you write a character "replies with" make sure you join the sentences together, eg, chapter 7- Mogranius replies with, "We are not sure.." (No need for space, just use a coma) With these grammatical errors you could easily use Grammarly or other writing programs to fix up your punctuation. One last thing, is this story written in past or present tense? It's hard to tell when you use a mixture of both tenses. Character Development:🤔🤔 I think the character development needs improving. The only one we get a solid introduction for is Eric the MC. The other characters just appear without much explanation (adding a small introduction for them could help). We do get some insight into Mogranius character but not the father of the MC. 🤔 He just appears. If you didn't write "father" I wouldn't know who this guy was. Story Development: There's a solid plotline, the author knows exactly what they are doing and there's no parts in the story that sound like filler content. Everything flows well. World Background: The world background is very well done. One of the stories strongest points. It's not packed into one chapter but explained gradually during different stages in the story. The opening provides a picture of the setting, the conditions the MC lives in and the world they live in. Overall; My first time reviewing this type of story, but it's very interesting. May keep it in my library 😊 The author can work on their grammar, characters more. But the story and world background are very stable, each chapter gets more and more interesting.

6yr
kimmy5560
kimmy5560Lv3

OMG!!!! This story is so great. Welldone Author, kudos to you...i love this so much, I can’t wait to read more...I get so excited when new chapter drops😌❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

4yr
NotStupidReader
NotStupidReaderLv11

Hello, author. After seeing your novel’s almost 500 chapters but it’s still got this undeserved feedback from readers. So, I’m here to suggest you a way to shine on this Webnovel. That is, you need to re-upload the novel again as a new one with a slightly different name tho. In addition, you may do a high frequency of uploading, such as, uploading 21 chapters per week or something like that. I think it may attract more readers to your masterpiece this way. Anyway, well done, your novel is a gem.

4yr
bheigh
bheighLv5

Reveal spoiler

5yr
KyleSullivanJr
KyleSullivanJrLv14

I enjoyed this story! A lot was going on and it had a very hyper feeling to it, which made reading it even better. Hopefully the author willwrite more in the future!

4yr
Reader4567
Reader4567Lv1

It.... has sentimental values. Author has made different relationships between the characters, you will see big tough heroes here but also loving hearts, different ways of expression and not to forget, a different kind of romance. However, the plot can be confusing sometimes, maybe Author can fix? Anyway, 4/5 star recommend for anyone who loves heroes. And a 5/5 star recommend if you want different characters.

4yr
Driton_Ebibi_4493
Driton_Ebibi_4493Lv1

CRAZYYY! I'm in Volume 2 right now and I can say that it's crazy, in the good way. Author has to fix the characters though, they feel blank. But the plot is crazy, I love it.

4yr
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