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Bierbart
BierbartLv145yr
2019-05-31 04:26

The english is readable but there is still a big room for imptovement. New world as far as it seems so gotta see how it develops but it seems based on a cultivation background. To the characters weeell... mcs IQ is probably below the roomtemperatur in an arctic enviroment 😅 lets leave it with that statement

Eldritch Shop System (DROPPED)

TrinityShock
4.7
129 Chs

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TrinityShock
TrinityShockAuthor

Ahaha.. well.. thank you for your review.. I just hope you understand that english isn't my first language, so that's why it's like that LOL

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Bierbart
BierbartLv14

Yeah i understand 😂 its just a rough estimate from my point of view :D u still have some grammarmistakes but not so bad that people cant really read it. For most original storys ur english quality is in the upper half or more but still a lot room to grow if u want to. I rarely give really high english stars cause i try to evaluate it fairly and neutral from my point of view 🤔

TrinityShock:Ahaha.. well.. thank you for your review.. I just hope you understand that english isn't my first language, so that's why it's like that LOL
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TrinityShock
TrinityShockAuthor

Thank you for trying to read my novel btw.. 😂😂

Bierbart:Yeah i understand 😂 its just a rough estimate from my point of view :D u still have some grammarmistakes but not so bad that people cant really read it. For most original storys ur english quality is in the upper half or more but still a lot room to grow if u want to. I rarely give really high english stars cause i try to evaluate it fairly and neutral from my point of view 🤔
5yr
Bierbart
BierbartLv14

Will probably read it further and then change part of the review 😂 u sucessfully included comedy. But the mcs intellect kinda makes me personally cringe reaaally hard 😅 i am currently like chapter 8. Thats why character and world is so low 😂 not much info about that till there except a bit of standart cultivation mesh 😁 buuut u can read it and get a laugh from time to time so why drop it early kinda. I think u know what i mean with that 😅 already found storys which were unreadable grammarwise but after some time it got better so welp 😂 dunno if u get my viewpoint with a story can still change a lot especially if the author writes for fun and practice

TrinityShock:Thank you for trying to read my novel btw.. 😂😂
5yr
TrinityShock
TrinityShockAuthor

LMAO 😂😂 I'll try to raise my MC's IQ then.. And i always thought that my comedy was too corny and not funny, as only a few of the reader commented on them XD

Bierbart:Will probably read it further and then change part of the review 😂 u sucessfully included comedy. But the mcs intellect kinda makes me personally cringe reaaally hard 😅 i am currently like chapter 8. Thats why character and world is so low 😂 not much info about that till there except a bit of standart cultivation mesh 😁 buuut u can read it and get a laugh from time to time so why drop it early kinda. I think u know what i mean with that 😅 already found storys which were unreadable grammarwise but after some time it got better so welp 😂 dunno if u get my viewpoint with a story can still change a lot especially if the author writes for fun and practice
5yr
darkergrim
darkergrimLv5

I just want to ask one thing will he be op or nah

TrinityShock:LMAO 😂😂 I'll try to raise my MC's IQ then.. And i always thought that my comedy was too corny and not funny, as only a few of the reader commented on them XD
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MadReader
MadReaderLv5

I gave 5 stars... Not because I've read the story... No... Grandpa gave five stars because I trust the previous review's comment and I believe he was an honest person... Anyway... Good job!

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bayu_toya
bayu_toyaLv5

This is a good story, but don't put your expectation too high. The story is fun, easy to read, and worth to read if you is charging your spirits stone for some other novel And lastly... Keep the good work, author. Selama tulisannya bagus, akan selalu ku ikuti ceritanya 👍

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SovietDoge
SovietDogeLv5

I gave five stars because I trust the person who reviewed like the person below me 10100011101011101010101110101011001010101010101010010101010010101010101010101000010111010101010100101010

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aSleepyPenguin
aSleepyPenguinLv5

I'm betting this will go Premium :| I'm stating this now while not many people know yet. Is anyone willing to take the bet? 140 Words huh, well then. I'm scared of primuem ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...

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MistahChu
MistahChuLv2

I liked this story.. Please continue to write them!!! What i like from this novel is: 1. The minecraft portal and the items that you could by from the shop. It's literally all thing that existed inside real world, games, movies and even anime. 2. When you can't upload, you said it first. Not like other novels, who suddenly didn't upload. Well.. in other words, you did a great job! (P.S. could you add some potions from Harry Potter too?)

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the_accountant
the_accountantLv1

pls update the story is amazing ...............................................................................................................

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Peachwoodgirl6
Peachwoodgirl6Lv5

I have only read a few chapters, this type of novel is new to me, but l have enjoyed the story so far. Your story is quite interesting, this the second eastern fantasy novel I am reading.keep up the good work.

5yr
bennylin
bennylinLv4

Mantab, saya kasih 5 bintang dan power stone. Lanjutkan tulisannya. Good job, I'm giving 5 stars and power stones. Continue your writing.

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koolsalad
koolsaladLv12

Very interesting, adds a lot of new ideas to the world of cultivation. I would think things would progress differently and the cultivators would be far more aggressive but overall I think the story is decent.

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