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2021-05-30 02:48

the writing quality is good, the net stability update 4 stars because by now the story is over (I don't count the reboot), the story is developed quite well although I don't like a lot of things the author added like the disease through juubi, the problem of the immortal chakra and the problem he received when he made the clones, the character is much more different from naruto however the change is not bad even if in the end he becomes like a dictator where he sees only good and evil should be converted or die, as the background of the world there is the dc world but it is very different from the original, however the story is not bad and I think it is good to read it as a pastime even if I would have preferred more fights and it is too focused on the emotions of the various characters (the most annoying thing are the poems / songs that appear in the story and as soon as I leave them I skip that piece because frankly you can't write a song it's one thing to hear it, it's another to read it)

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EternalBliss4U
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the chakra illness is canon. I didn't think of that thing. Its from a novel that hasn't been animated yet. Sage had the illness because of the Juubi and thought someone might have it later, so he saved the cure somewhere. Naruto got sick and lost majority of his power while people tried to kill him. Sakura and Sasuke went for the cure, they rode into space on a bike using chakra and what not. Yes, this is canon. You can just type Chakra illness on google and you will find it.

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WiLeYBiGhEaD
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Not my cup of tea. However many will really like this novel and will be drawn to this style. The writing quality is very good for a fanfic. After 10 chapters i saw very few grammatical errors. The story concept is interesting but I found its delivery to be a mix of good and bad. My first issue is the lack of worldbuilding. The author tries to tell the story from primarily Narutos perspective but also writes in a way that asumes the reader already knows everything about the DC universe and characters while providing them sometimes with exposition for introductions. Many of the characters he meets arent introduced at all or are introduced through exposition rather than narutos interactions with them. I.e. we are told about Shay Veritas by the author rather than dialouge with Kara who is taking naruto to her at the time. Also, i would have almost no idea what anyone looks like without googling their appearance. My next point is contrary to what many are saying about the main character and progression of the story. I find this to be inconsistent. Sometimes naruto acts like the original character, then he acts mature sometimes, clever sometimes, and dense other times. It may be just the beginning of the story as i have only read 10 chapters, but i really dont see how others find this naruto to be consistently genuine. It is not bad and i have seen way worse. But it just does not feel like naruto which is also tied to the progression of the story. It is to fast. The story completely glosses over the emotional aspects of what the mc and others are going through. I.e. surprise, narutos mom kushina comes back to life from narutos soul. Their reunion is only a couple of paragraphs without any serious dialogue. No Kushina asking where they are, how she came back to life, etc. This is supposed to be something incredibly emotional for the mc and kushina but instead of a scene that shows this, we get kushina trying to set up naruto with the first two girls she sees. Then naruto turns around and promises to bring karas parents back to life for no reason. There is a disconnect between what we are told about the characters and how they actually act. Overall, thus story has promise but I wont be continuing. For some, the issues i listed wont bother them much and others will say that i am nitpicking. But for me, the lack of worldbuilding, inconsistent mc, and the pace of the story with more exposition than necessary while glossing over important events are simply not a cup of tea i want to continue with.

Lackofsense
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Review at chapter 15 It’s really good, the gammer is good, and a lot of other thought provoking parts of the novel really enriched the world experience. 🧐 I enjoy the character building such as the supporting character. The main character is naruto so he behaves a certain way from his world. This however there’s a possibility for change and his to learn after it, he’s in an entire different genre. So talk no jutsu will be hard in the world he’s in. Naruto however still had that personality and way of speaking that connects with people and that’s an important trait of his. The author does him great justice in this regard. 😎 I offer and advice to give it a try, it won’t hurt and might surprise you. This novel might not be for everyone and that’s alright but it does provide good thought process on some situations and helps engage the people to debate over other topics. The novel does what’s it meant to do and that is to entertain and keep people enthralled. At chapter 15 there isn’t much development but it has a lot of potential. The power balance might seem weird but the author explains himself and reason with proof and logic. I have no problems with the power dynamics and it’s still a lot left to be explored. Romance is looking up, and seems to be quite the dynamic. So far there’s not troublesome characters that can cause major problems romantically but in the comics there are women who sleep around and are not very faithful. I don’t believe the author will make naruto suffer in that way, so don’t worry much about it. The author also engages and reads the comments so you can interact with him so if you have concerns he might reply. As for the release, it’s good but there could be more. Lol that’s just my selfish want since I want to read more. There’s also good amount of words so it’s not short chapters. Go ahead and give it a try! 😁

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