Review Detail of TheDangerousDino in The Return of Asgard

I didn't enjoy this but I'll give credit where it's due. When it comes to updates and word use Mr. NevoNeko has it down much better than most. In fact, I respect the fact they are having fun in their own story and has the balls to mix series like this, in fact, if this story started in another direction I would've loved it. Lastly, everyone's entitled to their own opinion and I have a feeling mine will clash with most of these reviewers. SPOILERS BUT I call bull**** when an 11-year-old beats a group of 12 fully trained Valkaries like he taking a walk. Have you seen an 11-year-old? You could throw those ****ers with no effort. And don't give me the, " He a god!" bull****. There's no proper show of growth from Thor the 2nd and to me, this just shows that the Valkyries are as threatening as a Chihuahua task force. Why even have them? I don't understand why this is a reincarnation story and Thor the 2nd's previous life has no significance. I truly think it would be awesome if some baby god (Loki is around 1070 years old) hosted a Triwizard Tournament just to be very confused as to what the hell is happening. Also, does everyone just forget the other dead children? The story just kind of goes 'yea **** Buldr and Thor the 1st' we only give a **** about Thor the 2nd and that never really goes away. Only Thor matters and without his involvement or convenience it doesn't exist. There are also things mentioned that don't get picked up again. Like little bro Vidar, Greek Mythos, and Thor's domain. QUE? I wish there were more explanation as to how these correlate to the story going forward. This is a personal thing but the Ch 6 he sleeps with 3 sisters. That bothers me on too many levels, no on ******, no on huge age gap. I have no problems with Ch 7, I like how he comes off as an arrogant ass. I actually love that What I don't love is the following chapters ( 8, 9, 10 and 11) these make me suspect he looked nothing into the Harry Potter series or Norse mythos. I'm not even going to bother explaining the impact of changes made... it hurts my head. Finally, chapter 13, "That charlatan fake dare calls himself a God, and only you would be foolish enough to buy such lies." Spat Lucius. Pretty well sums up my thoughts. He has no characters and bitches fall head over heels for this Mary Sue. If the author is conscious of this I'd be a good idea to play off of it in a comical fashion but no. He waves his Death Eater slaying dick around the haphazard plot. 4/5 Writing Quality: Good word use but needs work on punctuation. 5/5 Updates: Holy **** NevoNeko is very good on it 2/5 Story: Nothing happened that actually surprised me 1/5 Character: There is none and all the others exist to assist the Thor 1/5 World: Does not build upon existing franchises