Review Detail of Randominity in Game Of Thrones: Fireborn Overlord
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Clearly written by someone who has a superficial grasp of the source material. People say fanfic is easy, but it's not when you're dealing with a world as richly layered and well-documented as Planetos! The writing quality is that of a bootleg half-MTL translated JP novel, with stilted dialogue and a severe need to run a grammar/syntax check on it all. Punctuation flits freely outside the bounds of quotation marks, malapropisms gambol through the fields of words, and there's just little care for word-smithing put into the work. You might be okay pulling that stuff with Random Anime Fanfic #187309, but not when you're groping around in ASOIAF. There's a standard to strive for here. There's an insultingly minuscule amount of attention to detail going on here, from the big picture down to the small touches. There is no "sir" in Westeros, only "ser" for knights. The names used are jarringly not from the setting and look like Random Syosetsu Anglicizations. Westeros has history, culture, and conventions, but the author chooses merely to use it as a Potemkin backdrop for their murderhobo to use their system, and that's a damn shame. As a Syosetsu isekai with a system knockoff it's tolerable. As a fanfiction using the ASOIAF setting it's unbearable. Just change the few names you've used and rename the work to something original, because you're already just making it all up anyway at this point. Don't use a world as detailed as Planetos unless and until you're willing to put in the research and apply it. There's no excuse for it, given the rich trove of canonical content that covers all of this.
Game Of Thrones: Fireborn Overlord
Soulcrystal
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Well written criticism. At least someone is able to put out such texts. I acknowledge your concerns. One thing I don't agree to is the name you give Earth. "Planetos" - That is fan bias and not official. The people in the known lands speak the common tongue and other obscure languages. And Earth would nonetheless still be Earth in another language. To support this fact it is even mentioned as Earth in the books. Sure, we can go all around GRRM´s naming sense and call it Earthos but Planetos surely sounds more like a planet than the earth itself. We live on a planet but we call it Earth.
I didn't say you need use the term "Planetos", it's merely a shorthand for the setting that is readily understood by those who actually follow the fandom. Martin's own commentary is that they would of course call it whatever their own word for "Earth" is, but if you cared about Martin's commentary you wouldn't be writing this in the first place because he considers fanfiction theft and the first thing he tells fans to do when writing is to use their own damn setting (read the FAQ on his site, go back to the blog posts earlier this decade, it's all there and documented). Your so-called addressing of the ser/sir dichotomy is a cheap copout. The convention is simple: are you using the ASOIAF setting? If yes, it's Ser. Period. (Also, it seems the hypothetical female knight is in fact also "Ser", thank the show for clearing that up for us a bit over a week ago.) As I said before, it's better to just ditch any pretense of connection to ASOIAF and write your own thing, you're more or less doing that already. Just cut the cord. Given the adherence to the source material it's clear that you have no reverence for it and are only using it as a ploy for clicks that won't get you far on this already oversaturated site; you aren't going to get popular anyway with a once-a-week update schedule.
Soulcrystal:Well written criticism. At least someone is able to put out such texts. I acknowledge your concerns. One thing I don't agree to is the name you give Earth. "Planetos" - That is fan bias and not official. The people in the known lands speak the common tongue and other obscure languages. And Earth would nonetheless still be Earth in another language. To support this fact it is even mentioned as Earth in the books. Sure, we can go all around GRRM´s naming sense and call it Earthos but Planetos surely sounds more like a planet than the earth itself. We live on a planet but we call it Earth.
Well, to be truthful. You don't need to read it and I don't really give a ****e. That is all I wanted to tell you with my words.
Randominity:I didn't say you need use the term "Planetos", it's merely a shorthand for the setting that is readily understood by those who actually follow the fandom. Martin's own commentary is that they would of course call it whatever their own word for "Earth" is, but if you cared about Martin's commentary you wouldn't be writing this in the first place because he considers fanfiction theft and the first thing he tells fans to do when writing is to use their own damn setting (read the FAQ on his site, go back to the blog posts earlier this decade, it's all there and documented). Your so-called addressing of the ser/sir dichotomy is a cheap copout. The convention is simple: are you using the ASOIAF setting? If yes, it's Ser. Period. (Also, it seems the hypothetical female knight is in fact also "Ser", thank the show for clearing that up for us a bit over a week ago.) As I said before, it's better to just ditch any pretense of connection to ASOIAF and write your own thing, you're more or less doing that already. Just cut the cord. Given the adherence to the source material it's clear that you have no reverence for it and are only using it as a ploy for clicks that won't get you far on this already oversaturated site; you aren't going to get popular anyway with a once-a-week update schedule.
Dude relax the fanboy toxicity is leaking out, and to that comment about GRRM thinking fanfic is theft is plain stupid and just because he is a good writer doesn't mean everything he says is good fanfics aren't theft and if GRRM really thinks that then he is a stupid fat ****.
Randominity:I didn't say you need use the term "Planetos", it's merely a shorthand for the setting that is readily understood by those who actually follow the fandom. Martin's own commentary is that they would of course call it whatever their own word for "Earth" is, but if you cared about Martin's commentary you wouldn't be writing this in the first place because he considers fanfiction theft and the first thing he tells fans to do when writing is to use their own damn setting (read the FAQ on his site, go back to the blog posts earlier this decade, it's all there and documented). Your so-called addressing of the ser/sir dichotomy is a cheap copout. The convention is simple: are you using the ASOIAF setting? If yes, it's Ser. Period. (Also, it seems the hypothetical female knight is in fact also "Ser", thank the show for clearing that up for us a bit over a week ago.) As I said before, it's better to just ditch any pretense of connection to ASOIAF and write your own thing, you're more or less doing that already. Just cut the cord. Given the adherence to the source material it's clear that you have no reverence for it and are only using it as a ploy for clicks that won't get you far on this already oversaturated site; you aren't going to get popular anyway with a once-a-week update schedule.
After reading through the other comments i feel the need to come back and tell you that i wholeheartedly agree with your points and your criticisms. I have spent the better part of the last 2 hours writing reviews to authors that demonstrate a clear lack of understanding of the source material and was going to read this one next. Thanks for taking the time that saved me time :)