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XOMatsumaeohanaLv156yr
2019-03-28 20:44

This review is part of a review swap and valid till chapter five. Writing Quality: 5/5 Another rare gem on webnovel with good writing, while there's a few grammar errors. It's minor and the writing style flows well. Perhaps use grammarly and pro writing aid to help edit these mistakes. Update Stability: Only 5 chapters out, the author has other novels too so I can't judge just yet. Story Development: 4/5 - The author certainly knows where they are going with the story. There's a air of mystery around the first chapter, why did the God take away the child right as she was born? I'm hoping this is slowly fleshed out and explained during the course of the story. What happened to the Goddess? Character Design: 5/5 Only five chapters out, so this rating is subjected to change. So far only a few characters have been introduced. The author has yet to write a proper background story for them. However the female lead seems to be well thought out, judging from the chapters that's out. A girl spoilt by her adopted family and yet wanting to know, and see more of the world then she is allowed too. World: 3.8/5 - Can't say much of it, since this is just the beginning. But I can comment that the author writes the scene changes well and there's no confusion. The author does not leave room for confusion regarding setting and explains everything in detail. I hope he/she can keep this up as the story progresses. Overall: ? Not going to properly rate this yet. Five chapters is not enough to judge a story, and from what I've read so far. It has the potential to get better. The only suggestion I can really follow is what I wrote on writing quality.

Lightning Descends by Her Will

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Thumb's up to this novel. Title was cool and eye catching. A lot of surprising scene will pop up for sure, like the intriguing meeting between her and her biological parents. (Cant wait for that chapter) Great plot and unique to me, but it seemed like written in a rush.. And, I think you need extend a little effort with the update pace. Haha😄😄 Overall, this novel is cool. Keep up the good work!👍👍

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This is my first review, but I am so happy I found this novel. Hooked with only the few chapters available. Hoping for updates real soon and can't wait!

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