Review Detail of MC_Darwin in Reborn in DC (anti-hero)

Your Story needs a rewrite and a lot of proof reading. Don’t get me wrong, It has some definite potential and I like the concept you’re going for, however that can only keep my attention for so long. The ungodly amount of grammar errors made it extremely difficult to follow, and quite frankly had left me extremely frustrated after every chapter. An example of this would be in Chapter 12. “After checking her state for a wield, he took the drive sit and flew the jet.” Yea...I too was blown away at the lack of proof reading, if any. At this point I would like to point out that other than grammar the story itself has major pacing issues. I feel the author is writing less for plot and more to imagine himself in his MC’s shoes. In my own words this is a “hey bro ya know what would be cool” kind of story where you are just saying what you would do with no detail on the effort or practical ways of going about doing it. Overall if this was rewritten I would maybe continue but for now I have to take a step back from this novel. This is in no way meant to disrespect or hate, but to offer constructive feedback! — M.C_Darwin