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StenDuringLv56yr
2019-02-13 09:20

This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 20. A sports story usually runs as a coming of age one. And in the end this one does follow that fram. It does, however, start with the cracks showing in the current superstar's performance. There's a second arc which has just started. It's extremely confusing since it more or less reads as an entirely new story. Add that we're overdosed by magical realism out of nowhere and I'm sitting here totally clueless about where this is going. I can't even say if I feel clueless in a good or a bad way. The English used is shaky, tense handling wavering and usage of point of view a bit undisciplined. These aspects all detract from the reading experience. Now for the stars. Writing: Four stars. For the reasons mentioned above. Updates: Five stars. Basically been dumped to site in three chunks three days apart. So not every day but solid. Story: Five stars. With a very nice handoff from one main character to another this is your expected 'a new star is born' kind of story. Well done this far. Character: Five stars. There are just two of them at the moment with a third being introduced. The two main ones are well fleshed out, the third, for obvious reasons, less so. Supporting cast get less screen time. World: Four stars. Something's lacking in the setting. I'm yanking a star because much of the story is set outside the playing field, but only that field gets to become the assisting character, setting, needed for the story. Lastly, here's your chance to experience an unknown sports. Given an overhaul of the English language used I'm expecting a thoroughly pleasant read for anyone interested in sports stories.

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iamnaz7Author

wow. hands down to your very honest review. thank you because this really helps a lot in polishing the story. Will do my best to fix any loopholes as possible and update regularly

iamnaz7Author

wow. hands down to your very honest review. thank you because this really helps a lot in polishing the story. Will do my best to fix any loopholes as possible and update regularly

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