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such a nice concept but the story is all over the place, first problem is Grammar and it is a really really big problem, most of the time it's just some minor issues like 'he' or 'she' or something but in this story it's just god awful. There's also the plot which is just jumping from 1 place to the next constantly, no real pacing. Then the biggest and most cringy mistake a author ever makes, Toddler hero where nobody really questions a toddler talking like an ***** and making ***** decisions.
Living in Marvel World with DOTA System
kenneth_the_gamer
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I would recommend a different script for the MC story, the skeleton of the story would be something like that, a guy who transmits or is reborn in the CMU, with access to his own dimension, something like Azarothe or something, that starts small and with time and cosquistas of mc foce if expanded, he would start with one or two heroes of the dota, where they would be his teachers for both skills and fighting and other things, the mc would in time build his kingdom in this dimension until he had all unlocked heroes and structures and things like that, he would have a teino where he would be the supreme, similar to the asgardians and odin but with the mc having more control, and sometimes during his growth he would summon some hero to fight by his side in the world cmu, and in the end i want you to imagine something like the scene of the last film of the army of allies against the army of tanos only with the mc appearing and opening a portal where he would invoke a great army of his dimension with heroes of dota and other units. This would be a fantastic idea to be developed, it would take a long time to research about dota characters and their histories and everything else outside the um but serious epic.