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Liked your story, had to say I was totally hooked! The plot is good and that can be seen in writing. The way the author describes each scene leaves you hungering for more. Character and world design is amazing except for a few glitches here and there. But no worries the smooth flow of story makes up for it. Lastly, I would say that your synopsis needs a little work, if you know what I mean. It's too short, a little detailing won't hurt. But that's just my opinion. Keep writing 👍 This one goes straight to my library.

Writing: 5 It’s not perfect. There are some minor mistakes, bu they’re not glaring, so overall it’s passable. My biggest qualm would be the use of Name: for speeches. It should be formatted as Name said/shouted/cried/etc. with an comma quotation or vice versa. Or have gestures and expressions in between speech to let the reader know who’s speaking. It also heightens the reading experience. Updates: 5 Fine enough for me. Story: 4 It’s a different type of story, more like a crime drama, so kudos for doing something uncommon. However, while ambitious, it lacks execution. Rather than feeling suspenseful, it felt like everything was out into the open. Adding more mystery, such as not revealing MC’s true family background and discovering it in a more dramatic way, would greatly increase the lacking *******. MC also is a little too open and not cautious by immediately telling her connections with Zhao to Samuel. It doesn’t quite feel consistent with what I expected/was lead to expect of her character. Moving onto... Characters: 3 The MC is atypical still, so that’s a good point of differentiation from female leads. But, like mentioned earlier, it’s not quite there/the strong-smart FL isn’t fully accomplished/convincing. Additionally, the other characters lacked substance. It felt like some human, realistic puzzle piece was missing. With Samuel, we got his backstory, but somehow, it didn’t strike me in any sentimental way. It felt like a tell without an actual show. I think a lot of the story and character inconsistencies can benefit from deeper delving into their histories and emotions as well as their motivations and beliefs in life. MC’s killing felt anti-climatic, it came too soon. While she showed some real, human reaction to killing a person, it made me wonder why? Why is the way she wants to deal with all her suffering? Does she wish a quick end to only run from the authorities the rest of her life? How about bringing the whole issue to light? Making him suffer more? I couldn’t figure out her innermost pain and anger turned into believable action. Maybe we’ll see some of this later, but the killing still felt...too sudden. Lastly, she accepts her new identity pretty easily. From how she dealt with it and encountered people, it felt like this dual identity didn’t make much of a difference in the story, like it could easily be revised without it. World: 4 Details and descriptions of world and settings were sufficient for basic imagination of the surroundings and construction, but total comprehension and immersion wasn’t quite accomplished. Questions like the standing of families and their connections with the sovereign law and authorities as well as even the entertainment industry considering the amount of times MC sang. (I also didn’t see the connection of this subplot/talent of hers into the whole crime drama.) Overall: 4.2 A story with great ambition in its desire for something different and substantial but one that did not quite achieve all the expectations set for itself. It has the makings for a fabulous crime romance drama, but it drags and speeds up in places where it should do the opposite to create the underlying psychological and philosophical claims and power which spur the story forth in believability and thrill. Once all the pieces are strung together convincingly and cohesively, this is a winner.

This story is superb awesome good mamamia and everything else. I don't know how to explain it. Just read it yourselves. But on thing for sure, the author knows how to expressed the feeling of the mc. The rollercoaster ride and angst. But I'm quite dissatisfied to be left hanging on a cliff bare alive.

omg~ i like it! it started dark but not gross-- which is well, my personal preference. it's sort of thrilling at some parts. i can't really say that your novel is cliche cause i wasn't able to predict what would happen next and stuff. keep it up~

I'll admit, I was a bit dubious when I read the first chapter but the later chapters were of improved quality and enjoyed reading it a lot. The storyline is cliché but at the same time it's not. What I mean is that I can't predict when a twist's gone appear. So far, I love the story. My suggestions are: 1) To get someone to edit the first few chapters 2) Add some spaces between the lines(for dialogues) 3) Write a synopsis. This is the most important one. A synopsis is what attracts and gets the reader's interests. Hoping for more chapters. Thank you.

If you love romance within dangerous settings filled with twists and turns where you have no idea how everything will end up, then this is the book for you! I loved how it started with ****** vivid imagery, then dashed into the sequence of events that keep you on your edge. While I'm not a fan of romance at all, this book is one of the exceptions. Grammar is pretty good with a couple of negligible mistakes. But, the story makes you want to ignore them. Keep it up author! >3</

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The plot seems to be amazing!!! I am hooked! Though there are one or two mistakes here and there, but it's unnoticeable. Overall, this story is great! Keep writing!