Hello, your novel has been assessed and review by Virtual Bookshelf.
The review is as follows:
Many of the same remarks that I made in your other novel, Magic of Ages, remain the same in this novel. Thus, I will only point out the differences.
Mio doesn’t have as much appeal as Izzy, and the male characters aren’t as well defined or differentiated from character tropes as Ruben was. In general, everyone is following the designated character roles similar to novels with the same type of storyline. The plot as well, moves a little slower.
Now, some of this may be due to the genre. Romance Fiction in a mundane world heavily relies on small elements, mainly the interpersonal relationships, as opposed to visual and action-oriented genres like Fantasy. Even so, try to include more varied actions that build up into a greater event.
To differentiate these characters, think of their backstories, motivations, and idiosyncrasies.
For comparison, view the full reviews of both which are linked to your title on: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/02/webnovel-assessments-10/
After three chapters, you may request to be assessed again.
Thank you, and the best of luck on your writing endeavors! :)
