This is my first fanfic. I always wanted to write a fanfic but it always downed me because I have no confidence I could actually write. And I hope I could pull this off. So wish me luck.

Well where should i begin Writing style : im not english speaker so i cant judge so 4 stars Update : 1 chapter a day its good and i wont judge you for late update we all have life so 4 stars Story development : your story is too slow in my opinion i get it you want to explore or explain some of HP universe lore and knowledge but it make your story pace too slow, i read up to 15 chapter(including author note) but i feel like just finished a prologue so 3 stars Character : IMO you dont really explore all the character like what MC parent do knowing their son go to "WITCH" school, if they reaction to their son in early chapter as indication you can use that to make more interesting character, will they contact the church(they are rich people so i think they have connection)? Or will they contact goverment(in HP universe muggle prime minister know of magic (i think?))? You can just give us some clue or just the glimpe of it World development : you dont really tell what kind of world MC live on, is it AU? FANON? Or CANON? If AU what the different? If FANON is dumbledore lover to grindelwald? Or is it CANON? And thats it total rate i give you 3.3 Thanks and sorry fo bad english

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I really like the concept of this novel but at the same time some things dont make sense like him losing to children when it comes to fighting especially if this is his second life and knowing all he knows he shouldn't be such a chicken he should be finding knowledge and getting payback instead of even getting bullied and walked over by everyone even the headmaster I feel like he didn't even take any precautions to his situation and hes being a coward and stupid for not even practicing magic alone or learning muggle issues because after all this is his second life unless he was the same in his first life he should be able to use his life experience to help muggles and gain from them along with the magical community. I just feel like im reading about a victim instead of an mc lol but thats just my opinion and maybe thats how this novel is suppose to be.

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Loved it so far, great oc, interesting powers, love the addition of the obscurus. The rivalry beetween Riddle and Mc is good, better than many ive seen. All in all just love it and hope u dont abandon it

I just can't take it when I see such a good fanfic any stars so it goes. Fysuhsusushjsidhdjdihdkdudhdoddhjdyddidjdhdkdudjdudkdvshdsgd9dkdundhdkduskshdkdjddkhdbdhf

This is a great fanfic! The story is unique and is very well written, every chapter I am entertained. This story goes a different direction this most harry potter fanfics and is a great read. I recommend everyone should give it a try!

Argg i hate it when i read a novel and spend time reading it and in the middle the author had to waste it. The writing everything is good but the mc is a confused wuss.