Review Detail of SomeoneBad in Careful Not To Break Reality

This story is a rather personal endeavour for me as an author. I have always written plot-driven stories in the past and wanted to really have one where I quite literally forces myself to focus on the journey's and motivations of hopefully twenty memorable characters. I am personally fine with the writing quality, but since I am also trying to do an engineering degree while playing a dozen sports, I am only able to upload a new chapter of about 3k words once every three days. The first book's story development isn't as exciting as I thought it can be, but the second book will vastly pick up its pace and the MC wanders into enemy territory to save his friend. The galaxy is set in a state with three species coexisting in peace, but more on that topic will be explored in a later story arc as the galactic election returns. The main inspiration of this novel is all of the battle shonen genre, but I am personally sick of those set in a fantasy world. I have always be a science fiction fan, so I aim to craft a power system with science fiction as core while staying away from the mech genre and the best power system I come up with is similar to that of Black Clover in a sci-fi sense where each of the twenty bearers of artefact are given immense power, but they all need to explore to use the artefacts in various ways and different match ups as well as combining it with the rest of their skillsets.